I love it can't wait for more

Congratulations! You have risen bigotry in the wizarding world to a new level of dark, while the 'Light' is still in control.

I'm curious about the horrocrux dynamics in your world.

Surprising that Harry got "The Nagini Dream" since he's died twice.

Could you send us (muggles) to the new Super Earth just discoverd?

Not very good, usually something I don't say because I don't want to be rude but this story is just overall bad, and it will get worse if the first chapter is anything to go by.

enjoying

You keep on saying Hermione was raped and other times you say she was almost raped. Can you clarify?

Sorry I’m gonna have to bail out cause of this whole lesbian thing, again Sorry just not something I want to read about goodbye.

Okay, probably someone else who already said this, but most basic rule of writing.

Paragraph separation. Whenever you change the speaker, new paragraph. There's more to it, more occasions where it should be done, but that is the absolute most basic.

Without that legibility drops to near enough nothing. There's no good way to tell who is talking. If you want your story to be good you need to fix that on these early chapters so they're intelligible.

~Elwyn, Q.E.D

Too bad McClaggen wasn't oblivated.

I’m really confused here, the spell hit before he could rape her last chapter, but in this one she says she was raped? Also she says she was raped in the past but Daphne says she wasn’t raped then? So many contradictions, so confused!

If your going to put one piece stuff in this,can you atleast mark it as crossover. Thank you

Poor Harry, even his wrackspurts are freakish. :)

Was "dumb blonde" even a thing in 1990's Britain. I was under the the impression it's an Americanism.

No reserve keeper? (Canon Quidditch is a parody, anyway.)