Hmmm interesting... Now I see the answer to last chapters question. Ehem... *Timon voice* I can see what's happening, and they don't have a clue! Also good action sequences. I hope you expand on some later maybe give us some awesome saber duels. Anyway great chapter. I look forward to more.

Hmmm this Chiss is interesting what are his secrets other than strange scary mix of Han Solo and Thrawn, I'm excited to find out. Wonder what those jolts she feels is? Is he secretly a force user? Or something more? Only time and your creativity will tell. Anyway I'm looking forward to more chapters.

A great beginning. Introduces characters well and shows the conflict inside of our heroine. I'm anxiously waiting to see where her journey takes her.