Hey man, I already read your story and this quite nice. Except the misspelling and some grammar mistake , your story idea is nice I couldn't able to figured out how it's will end. And I also find that you use Bleach material in here. While there Zangetsu old man not change, but I think you should change how Dante calling Yamato (person) because that's quite off. And How about Aoyama? or Ayato? when Aoyama means literally Blue mountain, or that's will describe how she would look wear blue Kimono and unstoppable like a mountain. And Ayato is like somekind abbreviation from Alter Yamato with a bit Japanese aesthetic.

Well time to add the Valkyrie sisters to the hit list for toying with their lives

Buena historia

dud you need to improve you're writing skills man. that's all I'm saying.

Que vergil y dante trabajen juntos

Nice chap
Well Vergil was very big on looking at their fathers legacy so when Mundus rears his ugly head in he would feel obligated to finish what their father started ... also i would believe both of them arent too happy about the attack of their house way back when
With how Virgil is im sure Honest wouldnt be too happy about not being able to control Virgil or Virgils upright refusal to listen to him (maybe Virgil threatening him for trying to do so) so Honest could become an agent of Mundus for power could be an excuse for Dante to get his devil arms from 1 (mainly so Virgil can get beowolf and Dante Ifrit) also so their would be an actual threat to challenge the Sons of Sparta cause not much would be able to do i mean if Dante can woop Night Raid while not being serious Esdeath would be the only one to make him serious ... wouldnt be surprised if she chooses to go Nelo Angolous just to make them fight at full power since Virgil wants power but not be given power
Well im sure Mundus would have Nelo Angolos work on opening a portal for him

With how the chap end you can have Dante and Virgil double team Mundus since i have no doubt he would at least leave a way to track Virgil to destroy Sparta’s bloodline and Virgil would have reason to kill Mundus

The grammar is just unbearably wrong and I am usually not bothered by bad grammar but there are like 3 mistakes in every single sentence.

So if your putting Virgil in this can be your excuse to have Dante obtain Sparta early
Esdeath time stop trump card VS Dante’s quicksilver makes me think of Dante VS Bayonetta

First off im sorry for being harsh on the review I had to reread chapters 1 to 4 and now chapter 5. And also im thankful my feedback could be helpful and im also sorry making you feel like idiot that was not my intention and im sorry for that. And the chapter was good

Second now that i think about it dante seems pretty much op with with the power of Quicksilver and doppelganger and devil trigger
From a gameplay point of view it doesn't seems much. But from a story point of view it seems to be a little unfair to characters of akame ga kill im not saying they are weak. They are all strong
In there own in way. Im noting saying dante is godlike being. Even though the man has been
shot in head by lady or stabbed so many times in the chest by the demons in the beginning cutscene of DMC 3 and Walk it off and then got stabbed by vergil and then trish and alastor Devil arm then got stabbed by eye lasers from Mundus and then got stabbed by his nephew nero and then almost potentially got stabbed in the head or eye by V/Vergil and then he stabbed himself with the broken part of Rebellion while he also had Devil Sword Sparda on his back because urizen/Vergil broke Rebellion which gave birth to Devil Sword Dante and Sin Devil Trigger. Funny thing is want to how to activate Sin Devil Trigger Dante has to stab himself. Yes
Dante getting stabbed for some many times just became a game mechanic oh the irony is so true it hurts. The only weakess he has is just being in debt and having rotten luck with women.

To answer your question for Vergil appearing its hard and Tricky but there's always a way. It cant
be Vergil but Nelo Angelo who is vergil but being used as Mundus puppet. You said something in chapter 1 about a slightly recovered demon king Mundus you could go with Mundus is now fully recovered and is seeking for the traitor sons since vergil is under his control. now is looking to kill the last Son of Sparda. Not sure how trish can work in this. But seeing how Nelo Angelo had three boss battles
The first one is dante looks into a mirror see himself and then turns around where image of dante walks out of the mirror looking as carbon copy then shows his ture form then snaps his fingers the doors open out of no where nelo Angelo gesture to dante follow him Nelo Angelo runs out of the room Que the Ultra Violet Nelo Angelo boss theme. At end of first boss battle Nelo Angelo drops to one of his knees. dante was far Superior swordmen and ready to strike Nelo Angelo quickly recover jumps into air over dante. dante turns around to face Nelo Angelo who preceded to deliver a bunch kicks and punches at dante. Dante fell to the ground
Nelo Angelo grabbed him by head to lift him up and then to choke him with his right hand while he is laughing. as Dante is struggling for air his
amulet falls out of his red coat Nelo Angelo. Stops look at amulet and thorws dante. and starts to scream in agony and is being engulfed in blue and white flames and disappears

Thats it but at the end of day this is your story so if you to want put vergil in im fine it im sorry if i wasted your time making you read this.
Im looking forward to the next chapter keep up the awesome work.

I guess but would be hard to get Virgil to do anything unless Dante is involved maybe you can have him reading in the library till he goes to fight him
Well except the rocket launcher pretty sure Lady took that back it was hers Dante was just borrowing it

This chapter was okay aside from misspelling.
i know you said english is not your first language and that's okay. the was chapter okay for most the parts not great but okay.

Please answer a few questions if you can

Can you be specific on which outfit Dante is wearing and i know you said this takes place after Devil may cry 3 which leads into Devil May Cry 1 Dante's outfit. but it would helpful if you can describe Dante appearance to other readers who don't know how he looks like. Also can you describe Dante's and Vergil's amulets that their mother gave them. they wear them at all times because its the last memory of thier mother after she was killed by the hands mundus
They don't know it was mundus yet but soon.
Which leads to my next question. the whole reason Vergil summoned temen-ni-gru tower was to get the other half of Dante's amulet and
Power. You forgot to that mention that part.
and Dante's still has his amulet and after the with fight with Vergil and now their father's sword.

Dante has Force Edge/Devil Sword Sparda after defeating vergil and i was wondering if you can include the DEVIL ARMS from devil may cry 3 And the you GUNS get and I know you added the Six Styles. The the last two are crazy.

trickster fast as fuck boi
Gunslinger its name basically say's all
Swordmaster its name basically say's all
royal guard trash in DMC 3 but really good
In DMC 5 no joke godly good in DMC 5

Quicksilver slows time down. dose not stop time slows it down.
doppelganger give's you a Shadow clone that follows your every move.

And will the DEVIL TRIGGER FORM appear
from devil may cry 3 because he has it.
Since vergil did stab him with Rebellion
Awakening his demonic blood.

In DEVIL TRIGGER FORM Dante's appearance differs for each DEVIL ARMS

Rebellion, Cerberus, Agnirudra, Nevan, Beowulf. you can google each form to know how they Look like.

In Devil may cry 3
Devil trigger with Rebellion is the only form to let Dante temporarily Glide in the air. Where Nevan let's you fly or levitate in the air.

My last question as you said alot of OOC and i notice it straight off the bat with Dante.
he's not known for curseing and saying
Fuck you or bitch maybe the Reboot DmC Devil may Cry dante. but not DEVIL MAY CRY Dante if Dante from DMC is insulting so one. he would just joke around until they get piss off start attacking him. Not to say Dante doesn't curse He dose curse in the DEVIL MAY CRY games
But Dante always fun with it but he Would never
Say fuck Or bitch he well drop like hell or crap
Or dammit or shit or damn or ass. he has said this in DMC 5. and Dante has always been
chill and laid-back.

Im sorry if i'm sounding like asshole. i have to you give My feedback. I am still looking forward
to chapter 5 keep up the awesome work

Akame is really ooc here dude.

Very nice, if Vergil does happen to get involved maybe he could side with the Jaegers?

If this is after 3 Virgil is a puppet of Mundus now i think also did Dante keep Force Edge at the end of 3? Or did Virgil have it when he was sent to the Demon Realm
Not sure about adding him in since his still a bad guy and would probably massacre everyone in the castle on principle of being at the top after all he doesnt obey anyone may work in other fics only cause they can give something to Virgil but the Empire the best they got are the Tengus and Virgil has Yamato something vastly superior