very little of note is happening, no more time is spend on how ppl look and how much of a gentleman harry is. still nothing on how harry came to remnant or what he has been doing for the past 50 year.

why he is working with sdc instead of 'opening new mines' and simply out producing them and then sell cheaper i just dont understand. his best course of action would be to make his own city as a refuge for the poor and homeless to make a better life. one without discrimination

i hate crossovers or any story really that starts mid plot. it leaves so much questions that then get handed out sparingly, often with flashbacks, distracting from the story. i do not want to read what has happened because i already know where it will end up as that is where your story is at.
then there are some stories that just dont give the background leaving uw all to wonder te fuck did harry end up on remnant.

begin middle end

Your writing style is awkward and feels very forced

Great quality story. I believe that Harry will be the biological father of Weiss Schnee. It is a matter of time before Willow throws himself into Harry's arms.

I honestly thought this story was dead. Glad to be wrong. Looking forward to the next chapter.

great chapter! i really like the way you write Harry and willow's interactions and winter as a child is very adoreable! cant wait for more!

Nice to see an update. I completely forgot about this story.
Well, I hope that means you're back and will update more often.
Also, was that Cinder at the end?

- Mine
Wonder how the WF view Harry. Yes, he does business with Jacques, but also goes out of the way to save Faunus lives on the sly.

Conflicting messages in a way, which should be quite confusing to most. (Adam probably being an exception due to his hate all humans thing.)

- Tactics
Eh, stealing Jacques wife, family and company isn't a barbaric or unsavory tactic as everyone else would end up profiting from the change.

Willow in a loving relationship (better sex life too, heh), Winter, Weiss and Whitley have a proper father figure, massive decrease in Faunus discrimination from the SDC as Harry would make that a nonnegotiable aspect of his tenure (it's the New Blood vs. Pure Blood thing all over again). The only loser would be Jacques and in his case he's reaping what he's sown on the karmic level.

*shrugs*

- Guiding hand
*snort*
In short he's advocating a mix of Ozpin and Salem's stances, whereas the two former spouses were exclusionary in their approach.

Thus it's more likely that Harry's path will work, whereas theirs failed miserably.

*shrugs*

- Tribe
The Branwen's by any chance? As this would be around the time that Team STRQ is at Beacon or just graduated.

As that would be a massive flap of the butterfly's wings.

- Mugger
Is that Cinder?
Because if yes, than that's yet another major flapping of the butterfly.

- muratira
Can't be Blake
She's the same age as Weiss, Yang etc. And Winter who is older is still a kid here.

Could've been Kali, but she hails from western Mistral originally. (Based upon how she dresses). And she'd be a little younger than Willow, and that doesn't match the description.

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Corrections:
*... unlike earth where such a thing had ...*

"Earth", name so capital.

*... reaching down to pull out a dish of slice meat of some sort before ...*

"sliced"

*... from Mantel to the now floating city of Atlas, ...*

"Mantle"

At last, another glorious chapter. Have to admit though, the chapter length is absolutely criminal for something so good, but I'll take what I can get. As for that ending, I'm VERY interested in just who it is. It could be Blake, as a member of the White Fang trying to take revenge for the cave in, if they don't know about the people surviving. Or it could be Cinder, which would be absolutely mind blowing in it's implications for the future.

Like it so far, wonder how what will happen next. Throwing out a random guess here but was that Cinder, or I’m just completely wrong it’s just some OC you created for this?

really enjoying the story, looking forward to more

Excellent update

is that Cinder? nice

Well well Cinder Fall this should prove interesting. Great chapter cant wait to read more.

Lord Halcyon

Good chapter and I can’t wait to see what happens next and it is interesting to see that he has connections to a bandit tribe