I look forward to more chapters! This story's music pitch (I know, more bad puns) adds individuality, and adds many opportunities for exploring previously unexplored plot points.

Overall you are doing a good job. Grammar could be touched up a bit, and overall your story is interesting.

A great chapter!

Things are paced well.

You've balanced and developed your OCs, and overall the pacing is fine. Approved! Can't wait for next chapter!

You still had a few spelling and grammar errors, tho overall the story is interesting. Approved!

Very nice prologue! Only one question. Will the story have already existing characters, like Mikoto Misaka interact with Riuyi or your other OCs?