Hey, a good chapter :) I love how mysterious you have made it for Klara at the LV campus as she starts to settle there. The way you wrote the interaction and dialogue between both Klara and Kiara is great, I wonder how their friendship will grow as the story progresses. Not only that but you also added Mike to the mix very well too as he finds out what happened and explains to the duo what that entity was in the previous chapter. The only thing to watch out for is that some lines/wording needs revising in the chapter, but otherwise I enjoyed reading the chapter. I wonder what will happen next for Klara.

Hey, well this story has gone in a direction I didn’t expect it to go :) It was a bit of a mystery at the start with what was going on, obviously there are some questions there that will hopefully be answered later. Then we move onto what was going on with Klara’s life, finding out she is yearning for adventure and having strange dreams which leads her being taken to the LV school. The school atmosphere reminded me a lot of the Harry Potter universe and anyone’s first time in University where they are learning where things are etc. So far, I’ve enjoyed the ideas you’ve put into this and I wonder where you are going to take this story. I can see from the first chapter of this to the third one you’re improving your writing and spelling/grammar, and I look forward to seeing what happens in the next chapter.