hello good morning, i really want to know if you will continue fixing the past to save my family please answer me

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Good premis and we'll thought out, but needs a beta. Its hard to read and different font for speech is unnecessary. Also the paragraphs are long and not broken up correctly.
Also the romance went for 0-60 way too fast. There was no buildup or platform for it. Just one minute hes an uncle and the next they had feelings?
Not to mention the long winded explanations that take unessisary turns is not realistic. Someone asks a question and you get a whole life story ment to inspire empathy and pity. Happened a lot and just didnt seem like something that would happen.
I do like the thought tho, it is a good story it just needs a revamp. If instead of her arriving and spilling everything, she gave some basics and they learned things along the way, that would add some drama and mystery. Instead she is collecting worshipers and everyone knows everything. Sure she is powerful, but its all flowing too easily.
I'm just saying maybe go over what you got, fix the layout and maybe take away the giant and unessisary monologues. Let there be some character building, dont let everyone just accept she suddenly has control of the supernatural world. If there is no conflict there is no character development.
She has not changed at all, even instinctively. Sure shes op, but shes weak willed. She is intimidated by social norms. I was abused and it made me confident that if I survived that i could survive a lot. Going on a date got nothing on being chucked down concrete stairs and locked in a closet by a horrible step mother while dads at work. And i sure as shit wasnt bragging about how horrible life was. It happened. Dad found out and Bitch was punished and I came out alive. Stronger. Your oc seems to let the trauma define her. I know getting over shit is hard, but reveling in it can be toxic. Know you beat the odds and that what happened aint you. (Sorry for the tangent, got carried away)
All I'm saying is, sure she got a mission and all, but she has no personality outside "mission mission mission (oh hes hot) mission mission mission!" Lol it is understandable but seeing her trying to be normal is good. Just let her have more to her. She likes flying? Ok but she has no snark, sass, no real emotions outside the determination to do her mission and the flash of horny with Klaus. Like Idk how to explain what i mean here, but it seems Klaus likes her power and looks more than her person. She is clever I'll give her that.
I will keep reading cus I like the story. But please for the love of god get a beta!
Sorry for the long review. Thanks for sharing your story.
6/10

Holy mother of run-on sentances

thank you

Sur la forme, c'est assez illisible (conversations en gras et tout compacté) et je n'aime pas les Mary-Sue, mais je vais continuer un peu. On verra

thank you ;)

I love the idea, but your punctuation and sentence structure is horrible. Ever think of a Beta?

thank you ;)

wow I loved the chapter

Great chapter

thanks

great, thanks

hey it was a pretty good chapter. very detailed about what was happening to those around them. And let this be a lesson to all supernatural creatures.

thats the worst female harry name i ever read. seriously harry mother is LILY and he's aunt is PETUNIA, that should have give you a clue on what name should harry get if he become a she.