While I’m enjoying the story, the lack of any real punctuation makes it a bit troublesome reading. The concept is intriguing, so I hope you take this into consideration, I believe more people would enjoy it if you did.

Glad to see you back can’t wait for the next chapter.

Mars doesn't use Diamond Magic, he uses Mineral Magic.

I hope the pairing would be asta x mimosa

I like Leah in the Crimson Lions in this story because there were oddly no female members in that squad other than Mereoleona Vermillion herself so far in the manga and anime that I checked.

Even if Asta and Noelle are in different Magic Knight squads, they will be good friends like how Leopold is friendly and supportive with Noelle compared to her three siblings who mocked and belittled her in every opportunity even if Nozel did the wrong thing of protecting her after their mom Acier died from Megicula's curse.

Asta could help with Noelle's poor magic control with his smarter knowledge and training that he gained during his time at the Crimson Lions.

And no doubt, Asta will come to Noelle's defense and beat the crap out of her siblings Solid and Nebra especially even Nozel if possinle and Alecdora Sandler of Golden Dawn too as well more effectively with Anti-Magic during the War Merits Ceremony.

Damn, I did not expect there is a female Old Generation Eight Shining General OC member and I like her already.

Hope we get to see the fight between members of three Magic Knight squads (Crimson Lions, Black Bulls and Golden Dawn) and two of the Eight Shining Generals from both Old and New Generations: Evanora and Mars in the next chapter.

I see that there are Dwarves living among humans in Clover Kingdom and they have half-Dwarf hybrids with humans similar with Charmy Pappitson from the Black Bulls.

They even join Magic Knights in their ranks like Urel Grungi the Runesmith Knight in the Crimson Lions for example.

The Elves (Patolli/Fake Licht, Rhya, Fana and Vetto and the other Elves in Magic Knights' bodies revived with forbidden Reincarnation Magic) are gonna be pissed and will try kill the Dwarves for being associated with humans.

And the Dwarves will enjoy beating the crap out of Elves in hijacked human bodies like how Charmy beats up Lira possessing Rill's body for pissing her off.

Still, I hope Tabata will reveal the Dwarves officially in Black Clover manga and also Charmy's backstory of being a half-Dwarf in the future.

I bet Leah has a fat juicy ass

Ok I like so far

Story is good, but you are still forgetting to use commas.

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Can you this story an Asta x Mimosa pairing. Ot is one of my favorite pairings and I co UK ld see that pairing fit well in this story. They go great with each other.

You're story is good.

But there's this certain part about writing that you might want to know about.

It's called a "comma". It's used to separate the different parts of a sentence.

Here's an example: Me, my mother, and my grandpa went to the store, the pool, and the movies.

I don't even wanna think about all the commas you missed.

Pls can we have another chapter im waiting

Well that is certainly an interesting Black Clover AU where Asta was chosen by Fuegoleon Vermillion as a new member of the Crimson Lion Kings and Leopold Vermillion befriending him despite what others rudely think of a commoner with apparently no Magic in one of the prestiged Magic Knight Squads. Still, the Vermillions are my favorites in Black Clover because unlike most nobles in Clover Kingdom, the Vermillions are friendly and believe that, through training, anyone can become a great Magic Knight.

Of course this is gonna cause some canon divergences after Asta becomes one of the Crimson Lion King and I am pretty he is gonna get a lot more stronger and more skilled with his Anti-Magic under Fuegoleon's training especially when Mereoleona Vermillion gets involved and takes interest. That also includes potentially expanding more on the characters of other canon members of Crimson Lion Kings like: its vice-captain Randall, Ben, Gareth, Rokken, Ruben and Forte.

Since you want some OCs in the Crimson Lion Kings like Leah for example, I might give it a try.

Name: Urel Grungi
Age: 200
Alias: Runesmith Knight
Race: Dwarf
Gender: Male
Appearance: Like all Dwarves, Urel Grungi has a human-like in appearance but short on stature especially with a signature long brown beard of his people, and has a longer lifespan compared to humans. As a member of the Crimson Lion Kings, he wears their standard uniform of his stout strong build and height along with the cloak of Fuegoleon's Magic Knight squad.
Magic: Rune Magic - it allows Urel to to capture Magic with his hammercraft skills and Grimoire, binding its wayward energies into good solid rock and metal, shaping them into weapons and taming its powers for his own use offensively and supplementary.
Background: Due to little background about the Dwarves after Charmy Pappitson is revealed to be a half-Dwarf, I hope Yūki Tabata, the author of Black Clover, would expand more of the Dwarf race and their history where they had lived with humans and Elves in the manga.

Although I will try make a backstory that the Dwarves are inhabitants of Clover Kingdom like the Elves but they are so reclusive and stayed within their underground towns they built and thrived beneath the resource-rich mountains. Lemiel Silvamillion, the first Wizard King, tried to reach out to the Dwarves with some measure of success especially after he fought beside them and earned their trust. At least he got to open trade and diplomatic relations between the Dwarves and Clover Kingdom and the young man believed that with such accomplishment, he is one step closer to the goal of creating a world where humans, Elves and Dwarves live side by side as friends and understand each other.

We all know what happened as forgone conclusion if you know what I mean. Anyways with the defeat of the Demon God (Licht) and death of Lemiel which he was actually turned into a statue by Secre Swallowtail who turned into an anti-bird, the Clover Kingdom is in need of rebuilding and the Dwarves are called in for the task as they moved out of their underground homes and integrated with the humans full-time to the point they live side by side and mingled to have kids which could explain Charmy's half-Dwarf heritage.

The Dwarves gave the deceased Elves of the unjust massacre a proper burial, not knowing the latters' souls will return via Reincarnation Magic to take their vengeance on the humans thanks to Zagred the Word Soul Devil's manipulations.

At least Lemiel's wish for coexistence managed to come true to a measure and it was not in vain. It also helps that the group of the asshole nobles who were the ones who stole the Elves' magic power and massacred them are all killed off by Giant Demon Licht's rampage as karma, and some of the good nobles like the Silvamillions honored Lemiel's memory and carried on his work to rebuild the Clover Kingdom.

As for Urel Grungi, he is the longest serving member of the Crimson Lion Kings for two centuries due to his Dwarf lifespan after he had settled down in the Noble Region of Clover Kingdom from the mountains to live with humans and joined the Magic Knights. With his Rune Magic, Urel was able to forge Magical tools made available for use by the people of Clover Kingdom, and he is also known as "Runesmith Knight". At some point of his long life, he acquainted himself with young Theresa Rapual before her retirement and met Fuegoleon as a child whom he saw him grow up to become an exemplar leader of the Crimson Lion Kings. And that Urel met Julius Novachrona, the future 28th Wizard King and Magic Knight Captain of Azure Deer, who is very fascinated with Rune Magic with childlike curiosity and glee, which the old Dwarf wonders if Julius is an Elf in disguise.

When Urel Grungi first meets Asta, he finds himself perplexed that not only someone in Fuegoleon's Magic Knight squad has no Magic at all but possess a different kind of power that is an anti-thesis of Magic itself. He would like to study the Anti-Magic Weapons of Asta and see how they are made. At least Urel Grungi can quip that Asta fits right in the Crimson Lion Kings with his fiery and determined attitude to become the next Wizard King, and warns him to not overstrain his poor vocal chords, lol.

What do you think?

Did you know that Theresa Rapual was a former member of the Crimson Lion Kings and a teacher of Fuegoleon before she retired and became a nun? That would be an interesting revelation once Asta meets the ex-Magic Knight of the Crimson Lion Kings.

As for the Black Bulls, I'm pretty sure they can handle themselves long before canon Asta joined them despite what the other reviewer claims. The Black Bulls will just have to push on and surpass their limits of their Magic as their captain Yami would say. Of course Asta of Crimson Lion Kings could make friends with the Black Bulls since interacting with fellow Magic Knight squads is not exactly forbidden and help them out in any mission or battle he got himself into.

Anyways, this is a really good and hotblooded story, and I will be looking forward for the next chapter. Faved and Followed. :D