Hey, have you heard from RebelFanja recently?

please update this book is really good.

Really love the progress of events. The suspense is real!
Not much to say, except I can't wait!
Hope you update soon. Hope you're keeping safe too.

are you going to update soon?

Yes yes yes it’s 3:00 am in the morning I love an overprotective Shun so lacking in the stories in this fandom (none relate to be a relationship like your mention)
Nearly screaming off my head OMG. Love you Shun! Omg the vivid dream for Dan in here I felt it for him. I could replied in ok about it later (got to work on my story hahah )
Omg yes I’ll definitely reread cuz I stop in the middle of it just to comment ! My excitement

Sorry

Omg! I’m so sorry I was able to read before the new chapter. This is amazing, especially the dream got me so excited. I can’t wait to see more. Wonder how you plan to develop Dan’s character in this. Wow I’m surprised his yelp didn’t woke up Drago nor Shun (unless he’s far from Dan’s room) (this is not a critique just into the story!) Dan has some self control! Keep writing!

Are you going to bring in Nillious at some point?

Northern Goshawk: "Hope I'm nailing the angst down right..."
Me: "Hmm...I don't know, I think I'm going to need the next few chapters..."
Just kidding. :D

I think the level of angst is good. It helps that the usually calm character has become a bit aggressive. I think that adds to the emotional drama of the story.

I also think it was a good call to include Runo in the battle rather than have her watch from the sidelines. Gives her character a bit more substance and presence in the story.

I enjoyed the way you wrote the battle sequence. It's not disjointed from the rest of the writing.
Some battle sequences I've seen in stories, describe the technicalities of the fight in really good detail but then miss out on progressing any other dramatic elements like dialogue or setting descriptions within the battle. This makes it feel a bit disconnected from the rest of the story.

The way you've written it feels a lot easier to read and follow. It didn't feel like I had to switch between to different scenes.

Really curious about the next set of events!

Are you going to bring in the characters from Battle Planet?

I'm really enjoying this so far.

The pacing doesn't feel too rushed and I like how you've introduced Dan as someone whose experience has had an emotional effect on them and it's apparent to the people close to him. I feel like it brings more emotional depth to the story.

If I may, I would suggest being careful with the pace that you resolve any angst/emotional drama in the story.
Too fast and the emotional impact may feel shortlived and not relevant to the story plotline.
Too slow and the suspense and dramatic elements may feel start to unresolvable and the story would feel too slow.

It's slightly confusing when I see Drago's dialogue as italics but when other people respond to Drago, their dialogue is in normal text. Because of the change in font style, most times I assume that Drago is speaking telepathically and that everyone is speaking normally.

I was wondering if this is intentional.

Like I said, really enjoying this so far and hope you update soon.

(P.S Welcome to the fandom! - I prefer the original series, not a fan of reboots although I like how you've incorporated the gameplay mechanics from the reboot into the original Bakugan series world. It gives a good indication of how things could change over time when one is absent.)