I really need to get back on my game when it comes to reviews, this is ridiculous! Anyways, OwO what's this?! A bad-ass update for me indulge myself within? Ah, my girl! You shouldn't have! Well, actually, you should have! Because I can't put into words how much I've been wanting to see this chapter be uploaded! And damn, it looks even better here! All of these characters are interesting, and I love how they have these joke stats that give a good idea of what their personality is like! That, and they gave me a good chuckle!

I have to commend you, your writing is really excellent for the same reasons that Heart gave! Clear, concise, and not too wordy or convoluted! Just how I like it, and it works well for action-orientated stories like Naruto SYOCS!

As for the characters, Kane is the boy that peaked my interest the most out of the others! Maybe it's because of my attachment to abrasive boys, or it might be because of the last name associated to him! An Uzumaki? OwO Hmmm, interesting! The other was Zasshu, who seemed like quite a fun character overall, and I like that! Him, Midori, and Kaki are welcomed additions! Also, the way that Midori communicates is actually really cool and creative!

I liked Risa a lot and yeah... that part of the chapter made my heart palpitate, not gonna lie. That was heavy... REALLY heavy. It seems like this story isn't gonna shy away from the darkness, huh? Well... it is a welcomed one! UwU

Seriously, great job, Vana-chan! Sorry for this super late review... and for it's length, but I promise that the next one will be much better!

So! this is what you've been up to instead of going to sleep, huh? :) Well, I can certainly say that the wait was very much worth it because wow, we have a LOT to unpack with this introductory chapter, right from the very beginning! Firstly, the characters that have been shown so far! Honestly, I don't see any issues with any of them! All of the newly shown kiddos are quite charming in their own ways! Granted, my babey-boy is among the group, so I might be a little biased in all honesty, but still! The chapter was well-written! The pacing wasn't off by any means, and I didn't see any crucial errors either! That might be because I need new glasses, but I also know that you do well in making sure that a chapter is perfect on the technical side of things~

Okies, I have to say, your action still holds up amazingly! There is this sense of urgency that's conveyed through the text of each showdown. It's quite subtle and might be easy to overlook for others, but I could feel it just fine! Plus, you write in a way that makes it much easier to understand, as opposed to other Naruto SYOC writers who struggle with making the action simple and easy to follow! You've managed to break that curse here, so kudos to you, Vana-sweetie~ You hottie, you~! I loved the joke stats a lot too! Bondage chapter, when?!

The characters that stood out to me the most, other than my sweet little Kane, of course... were Zasshu, Risa, and Zennou, who has already been introduced but I find him to be a very big favorite for me in this one purely due to how he seems to operate~! It feels like we're seeing that protective side of him, and I love that he knows that if he would've jumped in between Kaki and Kane's fight with those bandits, he'd essentially take away their chances of fighting! Zennou is a favorite for me, I love Zennou a lot~

Kaki is another one that I liked! She's fun, energetic, and I'd consider her interactions with Kane to be a lot of fun, which is surprising when you take into consideration how he is~ A fight-crazy cutie! She provided a much-needed contrast to the group! Nibui-sensei does as well! Kaki does seem a bit more under-powered(?) in comparison to the others, but I LOVE how she doesn't let that get in the way of her kicking some ass! I like her~

Zasshu was quite frankly the cutest little speed-demon, wasn't he? I was infatuated with his adorable interactions with Midori and got immediate shipping vibes between those two! Junko was another character that worked to the group's favor! She seems like the most level-headed character out of them, which I liked! I also just love how done she is with how much Zasshu and Midori were complimenting each other, fufufufufuuuu~!

Risa... wow, I have a lot of respect for her in all seriousness. I wasn't prepared for the incredibly dark implications that were taking place in that section. Holy shit, I want her to really rip whoever was responsible to shreds. Jesus... and that poor baby boy... and that lady... who had to not only witness all of that, but was also forced to endure... such atrocities... ugh. Her taking the time to comfort that woman really got me stirring up the tears~!

*evil smirk* but... you know how much I love darkness, don't you, Vana~?

Ahhhhhhhhh! I love, love, LOVED everything that you've shown of Kane! I can't wait to see where you take him throughout this story! I have soooo much else to say, but I am cooking breakfast whilst writing this, so I must give my farewells~!

Byeeeeee~

I wanted to send you a PM but my account is new, is this SYOC still open? Can you PM if it is, since I cant PM you? sorry if I am being a nuisance

I must say that I really liked the chapter! Your writing style is really good and I have nothing I can point out that I can say was written badly.

I also really like all the characters and the way they interact with each other so naturally. I also really liked this small piece of the character's past that that was written in every time the POV changed to he character.

You're off to a strong start in terms of character and plot. You've laid the groundwork for an interesting mystery, that being how it's possible for Midori and the others to have been transported to Naruto's world. The three OCs you've debuted in this chapter are each interesting in their own way.

A couple minor criticisms I have are:

1. You've made Ibiki a joke character which bugs me a little because he was taken very seriously in canon. I'm hoping that moving forward, you're a little more faithful to the character depictions in canon. Innovation is definitely welcomed when done correctly, but reducing characters for the sake of a laugh or to make your OCs look cooler isn't very respectful to the source material.

2. I'm pretty sure that it's canon that Naruto became hokage after Himawari was born. I think you mentioned in your author's notes that you're writing this as if Boruto hasn't been born yet but Naruto is already hokage. If you don't consider anything after Chapter 700 of the manga canon, I think thats a fair perspective to have so this a very minor complaint.

Ooh~! This looks promising! I'll submit one! :D

Oh, what a treat! It’s rare that we get a Naruto SYOC that shows so much promise and potential, so this is a very pleasant surprise! From only this prologue, I can see that your writing is polished and very well-executed! I wouldn’t be surprised if this wasn’t your very first rodeo, Nirvana! The cast of characters alongside the canon crew are very interesting, especially Midori, who I find myself enjoying the most since the fact that she’s mute makes her really interesting!

On the technical side of things? This was a damn-near flawless chapter! Incredible dialogue with none of the characters being OOC-ish, great descriptions, steady pace, colorful imagery that helps to get a feel for how the characters look... yeah, this is super good! I’d be a fool to pass up on the chance to get in this story, and so would others! Expect something from me soon!

Interesting

So that means in Menma's timeline Boruto wants to become the Hokage!

Wow, your story's concept is similar to my own story (you should check it out). TBH we need more stories about dimension travel where the MC gets isekai'd to an alternate world. To my knowledge, the Harry Potter fanfic category seems to have more of that.