Setting aside the grammar mistakes (not too many, was legible regardless) and cliches (also not a bad thing) I really enjoyed this. Good work friend. Just got to the most recent chapter and was like "aw fuck no more yet?" Not many fics get me like that. Really like the VR eroge theme in the current "arc.". Haven't seen that in a Loud House fanfic before. Great stuff, look forward to more.

I say keep it for the arc. I’m actually find your storytelling very entertaining

Throw in a childhood friend character that Lincoln thinks of like a sister up the ante it could be a glitch in the system

I can already tell where this is going.
Loud Sisters: you're into Lucy.
Lincoln: no I'm not.
LS: we've caught you two together many times!
Lincoln: it's not what it looks like.

Ok it's not what it fucking looks like. We've established that. Now remind us again that it's not what it fucking looks like. Lucy is in his bed but it's not what it fucking looks like. They're hugging and saying they love each other but it's not what it fucking looks like. Lincoln is watching incest anime but don't worry. It's. Not. What. It. Looks. Like. You should just rename this story that. It's all you've been writing. It's so God damn annoying. This had potential. Now I just realized I've been wasting my time.

Is there anyway you can have Lincoln kick Lynn's ass? It just seems like his sisters and lynn in pitticular look for any excuse to beat him up and invade his privacy. He seriously needs to tell the whole lot of them to go to hell.

Feels like Lincoln has been depressed over "Washington" Park's lead singer dying for three chapters now. Bit tiring to see, least do one for Pop Pop dying since his VA died. More recent and relevant.

Fun slice of life chapter.

I watch MASH for a pick me up.

Is there a reason you keep putting dialogue of two characters in the same paragraph?

This is really cute for being what it is tho I gotta ask Gonna do anything with haiku or was that a throw away I think it’d be cute to see Lucy get jealous

I ship Jaune with Pyrhha still.

Hey I'm really curioius what was base for Spyr It is was steven universe or something else?

Awesome new chapter! Maybe Lincoln is just a casual and not a "pro" gamer he thought he was? Lily and Lynn being better at games than Lincoln seems unfair, Lana had that new ep but she also had the sister's help to GG.

Sigh, this is just my suggestion. Since this is the only story where Lucy is blonde and Lincoln has black hair, It would be a great opportunity to do a Angel of Death cosplay as Isaac Foster and Rachel Gardner.

If you don't want to write it, it's fine. I just want your permission instead to write it. It doesn't need to be canon, just a fanmade for your universe.

Pm me or anything, I'm on mobile so sorry if I can't reply.

How many times are you going to use the fucking "its not what it looks like" ending? It was funny the first time now it's just annoying