i really loved it. it was dramatic. after a few paragraphes, i got really into it and would like tobsee what happens next. So could you PLEASE UPDATE!

RE: Review by Guest

Thank you for taking the time to review this. This is only my first FanFiction, so it's not a hundred per cent perfect.

Really nice. You put a lot of thought into it and it seemed realistic, I like how Steph really cares about her friend. One thing -2 hours early bedtime for the rest of the month seems a little harsh compared to Michelle's 1 hour early for the Funny Buddy stuff. Then again, Steph was risking her own life, too, so it's not totally unrealistic either.

I also like this as sort of a followup to the incident with Charles; I'm glad to see Steph having the courage to call social services. And, running in and trying to help herself is very much like Stephanie! I don't know your age or how much writing experience you have so while you might want to include more of Steph's feelings in your next story, this was excellent. There is a lot of good action, and I only mention adding more of how Steph is feeling about what is going on because it's a way to improve one what you've already done. And, it's so fast paced that it seemed more fitting that you didn't have Steph stopping to meditate on what might be wrong with Kyla or thinking back to Charles (which, since she's in 5th grade, had to have been only weeks to a few months earlier) and telling herself, "This isn't going to happen again to someone!" Which, after Charles being in the hospital like he was, I can see Steph getting all excited and thinking she has to play superhero this time.

You do a great job keeping characters in character and with spelling, etc., as well implying things like the drinking or the suicide attempt without getting gory, though I agree T is the right rating due to the latter. Also, you can't have 2 of the same story up so take the first one down.

In summary, if this is your first story or just your first story on , you do a great job of keeping true to the series and of telling a great story with an important message about being willing to help when there's a problem.