oh please write the sequel!

i enjoyed the whole story my darling.. and i look forward to your next one my dear. blessings

Que historia más bonita y pareja encantadora. Me quedé sin saber que deseo pidió. Me imagino que pidió que la joya desapareciera. Me encanto felicidades.

This was an amazing story! I look forwarded to reading more from you!

AMAZING STORY , I'M HOOKED SKSKKSKS

Nice story

I loved the story from the start. I loved how Sess took to Kagome quickly and he was sweet on her. This was a great story with good writing and flow. It was a pity it turned meh near the end cuz of Rin and Kikyo cuz they brought forward three problems I had with the story near the end.

First, Rin felt forced into the story. She didn't add anything to story. I hated how she was brought in – Sess takes a personal interest in Rin just cuz she looks like Kagome. And Sesshomaru, who takes in assassination requests, of course I get it if he refuses to take on any jobs on people he knows/likes but he basically called out a client to kill them just cuz he liked the target?! Who's a stranger! But what got me was the absurdity of having Kikyo/Tsubaki make an assassination request (even if they don't know it's Sess's clan, they should know youkais are the assassin). Both Kikyo and Tsubaki are dark miko/witches (with ability to control anyone via tainted shards and they already have a group of pawns doing their bidding) could've easily killed Rin themselves! Or if they wanted Koga to take the blame (I still don't get why they used him cuz he's Eastern heir so not the problem of the West/Sess) why didn't they have Koga kill the girl! If they wanted Sess to get the political heat, why didn't Kikyo (who has full control of Inuyasha) just have Inu kill Kikyo directly? That would've been much quicker/better way that getting Koga to hire a youkai assassin. All I got from Rin was that whole thing didn't make sense, full of plotholes and that you just wanted to orphan Rin and bring her in as Sess's ward – just like in canon. Which was bit lame.

Second, Kikyo's story was confusing. Sess stated in C1 that Naraku was a clansman he banished cuz they discovered he had a den of youkai/human women he was abusing and whoring out. Inuyasha discovered Kikyo there and rescued her. But then C6 Kikyo's story didn't make sense. Naraku "buys women for Taisho hotels"! So obviously takes the prostitutes to the hotels. Seriously hard to believe that the hotels/Sess didn't know of the whores/prostitution ring so must've been sanctioned by Sess (even if may be under the table) and since you made him take up assassination as a side business, prostitution seems very plausible. In fact, Inuyasha "ran into Kikyo in the halls and came back later to pay for her" so Inuyasha knew about it and even paid for it! Turns out even Koga/E. heir also paid for it! So doubt Sess didn't know of what's going on in his hotels. But IF Sess's thoughts in C1 is true and not sanctioned by him and he broke it all up once he found out, Kikyo would obviously know all that and know Sess is not to blame. Sorry, Kikyo's story was full of plotholes/weird backgrounds that didn't make sense. Making her the villain is fine but C6 her back stories seemed to clash with the story to that point. Even her family being historically responsible for Shikon/Midoriko's tomb seems forced to give her a link to Shikon cuz if this is true, she is not only Midoriko's relative, but also Kagome's. And why didn't duty go to Kagome's family (who are descendants of Midoriko and follows her teachings and even inherited her healing youkai powers)? Also mentions Kikyo's hate for Sess stems from her family losing money/being riddled with debt cuz of the youkai revolution Sess started 100y ago. And during this time most shrines went out of business/barely surviving. But then how did Kagome's shrine manage to live unscathed? Even if in a bad neighborhood and didn't sound rich, they sounded like they were thriving with lots of patients/people. And seeing Kagome have no qualms about taking Sess's payment for healing, sounds like they readily accept payments.

Sorry, Kikyo's background just brought out a lot of issues and turned pretty confusing. Also hated that thirdly, this brought forward the fact that Sesshomaru's an evil guy. In the beginning he seemed like a good guy running legit businesses and I thought the title/"darkness" was from policing youkais cuz they'll be more instinct driven so driven for harsher actions/punishment, especially towards those who committed evil acts which didn't mean he was bad at all – just a very different nature from humans cuz youkai world will be filled with more violence/punishment/killing. But with Rin/Kikyo entering the story, turns out the guy runs an assassination side business! I doubt he vets targets to see if they're "worthy" of being extinguished but simply take on the job if it fits their monetary/risk requirements – so not a good guy at all. And while I'd been sure there's no way Sess didn't know that his hotels were being used as a whorehouse, that suspicion had been raised in C6-7 but never confirmed. Till C8 when he refers to it as "his hotel's brothel". So he knew what was going on! Sounded pretty hypocritical for him to judge Naraku when he's worse. It's actually HIS prostitution ring that Naraku runs for him. Sorry but I felt bringing in Rin and Kikyo indirectly brought forth issues with Sess and turned him into an unlikeable character.

To be clear, this is still a pretty good story that I enjoyed (and I’m a critical reader, I only like a handful of fanfics as too many feel like they're written by a sixth grader whether in grammar/speech/actions). I really loved the first part of your story. The last chapters 6-8 left me pretty confused, frustrated at the holes/discrepancies and disliking Sess which was a pity cuz this great story turned meh at the end. Thanks for sharing though, and a huge kudos for seeing the story through till the end. Your writing's good though and the story flows nicely. My suggestions are that 1) you think through whether really need to bring in a supporting character or not and if so, what's best way to do it (eg Shippo works fine in this story. Rin felt too forced and I felt would've been best if she wasn't in this story). 2) think through the character's background carefully and ensure it works with your story (Kikyo was fine in the beginning of the story but in the second half raised more questions, confusion and scepticism for me). 3) You didn't have too many grammar mistakes but the apostrophes started getting bit annoying cuz it happens so often. There's a tendency to make everything plural by putting apostrophes AFTER the S instead of before it (Eg Sesshomarus' / lords'. Or even just Kagomes/Sesshomarus without any apostrophes). You also tend to add an 'i' where there shouldn't be one. Eg Waving not waiving. Wasted not waisted. Faring not fairing. Bated breath not baited. FYI going forward but of course it's your story so you can ignore all above :)

I hope you continue writing and I look forward to reading your next SessKag story. Thanks.

I loved every moment of this! Thank you!

a very nice story. Thank yoi for your work

Thank you for a fresh storyline. I love that the main characters are more attune to their feelings and are kind to each other. An enjoyable read. Love it. Really good job.

Great story. Please do a sequel.

Love it!

An epilogue would be nice! Maybe a little tying up of lose ends? Great story though!

I love it!

awesome story so far thank you.