| Reviews for The former sith Ninja |
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Darth revan1998 chapter 3 . 6/15 Can't wait to read more |
Sageofchaos chapter 3 . 6/15 hope to read more. |
Calebros chapter 1 . 6/14 Not bad, but could use some proofreading from you. For example: "How has the council been called here?" Considering the answer that should have been Why and not How. He was a Jounin, an elite ninja and only has one attack that can defeat Malgus? He must have been a very bad ninja. "In the swamp a brown haired females 13 appear. "Wake up."" Heh? In the end: it is not bad, but just this chapter could have been divided into 5-6 at least with more details (or really any details at all). For the proofreading, try to read your chapter out loud after a few days you have finished it. |
SPark681 chapter 3 . 6/13 Hmm, a nice chapter gonna be interesting how things progress anyways keep up the great work! |
Jose19 chapter 3 . 6/13 I wonder what is Naruto’s level of skill in the force because there are a few Jedi more powerful than him not counting Yoda or Mace. |
HyperA2019 chapter 3 . 6/12 I am looking foward to Chapter 4. |
BJJF691 chapter 2 . 5/4 More damn it! |
Grounded Forever chapter 2 . 5/4 This is really bad, but it’s bad for the right reasons. You have a really good idea, you just need to refine your writing technique. |
SPark681 chapter 2 . 5/3 Hmm, a nice chapter I wonder what's next anyways keep up the great work! |
Ryu wolf chapter 2 . 5/3 Well done with this chapter |
ManticoreBlues chapter 1 . 3/20 not bad, the happenings are quite forced but I like the idea of the fanfic, hope to see more |
stupidlymockingothers chapter 1 . 1/23 Very interesting premise. Just too fast-paced. Felt like I'm reading a screenplay more than a fanfic. Maybe describe things in more details? And have some inner monologue here and there since your Naruto kinda seems like a robot following orders. Still, interesting development so far. Let's see where it goes. |
Guest chapter 1 . 1/6 A great first chapter |
BJJF691 chapter 1 . 1/7 Update soon. |
meh31324 chapter 1 . 1/7 Great story keep up the good work |