Reviews for The former sith Ninja
Darth revan1998 chapter 3 . 6/15
Can't wait to read more
Sageofchaos chapter 3 . 6/15
hope to read more.
Calebros chapter 1 . 6/14
Not bad, but could use some proofreading from you.
For example:
"How has the council been called here?"
Considering the answer that should have been Why and not How.
He was a Jounin, an elite ninja and only has one attack that can defeat Malgus? He must have been a very bad ninja.
"In the swamp a brown haired females 13 appear. "Wake up.""
Heh?

In the end: it is not bad, but just this chapter could have been divided into 5-6 at least with more details (or really any details at all).
For the proofreading, try to read your chapter out loud after a few days you have finished it.
SPark681 chapter 3 . 6/13
Hmm, a nice chapter gonna be interesting how things progress anyways keep up the great work!
Jose19 chapter 3 . 6/13
I wonder what is Naruto’s level of skill in the force because there are a few Jedi more powerful than him not counting Yoda or Mace.
HyperA2019 chapter 3 . 6/12
I am looking foward to Chapter 4.
BJJF691 chapter 2 . 5/4
More damn it!
Grounded Forever chapter 2 . 5/4
This is really bad, but it’s bad for the right reasons. You have a really good idea, you just need to refine your writing technique.
SPark681 chapter 2 . 5/3
Hmm, a nice chapter I wonder what's next anyways keep up the great work!
Ryu wolf chapter 2 . 5/3
Well done with this chapter
ManticoreBlues chapter 1 . 3/20
not bad, the happenings are quite forced but I like the idea of the fanfic, hope to see more
stupidlymockingothers chapter 1 . 1/23
Very interesting premise. Just too fast-paced. Felt like I'm reading a screenplay more than a fanfic. Maybe describe things in more details? And have some inner monologue here and there since your Naruto kinda seems like a robot following orders. Still, interesting development so far. Let's see where it goes.
Guest chapter 1 . 1/6
A great first chapter
BJJF691 chapter 1 . 1/7
Update soon.
meh31324 chapter 1 . 1/7
Great story keep up the good work
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