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I’m sorry for not reviewing this when I read it, but I saw your tumblr post about this fic not getting enough attention and I figured I’d go ahead and review now!

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Ouchies. Lots and lots of ouchies. This fic made me SO uncomfortable and was extremely unsettling to read, and I mean that with the deepest of compliments. You’re very brave for posting content like this and I commend you for that!

Anyway, I’d have to go back and read to leave a more detailed review, but I can definitely remember that the pacing was outstanding and the ending was devastating. Ugh. My heart. But overall I think this fic was brilliantly written! Love the darker content. :)

Read this on AO3 like you suggested and I'll leave a comment there too, but had to leave one on here!

CAT! OH. MY. GOSH.

The depth this story goes psychologically speaking is astounding. And to be quite honest, kind of scares me. But in a good way? lol Starting out with the extreme Bible reading, 'God fearing' woman Madeline insists on being at the beginning and almost exclusively calling him devil is all the Madeline characterizations phans are used to, but to throw in that one backstory that the whole encounter circles around when Erik was 10 WOW. WHOLE other level. Madeline is even more twisted, and frankly perverted, than I think most people imagine she is. The way she won't acknowledge Erik as her son, instead only seeing his trip as the devil trying to seduce and ensnare her AND THEN GIVING IN. Ugh, I hate her yet I feel sorry for her all at the same time.

Which brings me to Erik. Poor, poor, unloved Erik! At first I was a little like wtf Erik with his odd way of loving, but like you said- he's been robbed of love. He doesn't know what is and isn't the kind of love he should give his mother. Then you BROKE me when he started pleading to not do it, that he just wanted someone to care for him and do motherly things, not sexual things, but then Madeline has him wrapped around his finger and he's convinced that it's the only way she can love him AEIJWFHQDOJWEKBFO

"Love me then," GoOsEbUmPS! For real- I was like OOOOOOH we're gettin' serious now! And then Madeline warps back into the unending circle of her righteousness and Erik is evil and there's no way *she* would actually willingly sleep with her son the devil and then. THEN she invites him to bed! *shakes head* a lost cause right there. And I know it's her own mind that her twisted desires are coming from, but Erik's accidentally/not accidentally hypnotizing her certainly didn't help either!

In the end- that was one WILD ride! And I think I liked it? A lot? Yeah. It was great! Thanks for writing this and entering!

I stayed up to read this until 6 AM in the morning. It is now 7 PM the following day and I haven’t stopped thinking about how I’m going to address this fic. This is the most disturbing fic I’ve ever read. I almost called it quits at several points in and that has never happened before with anything I’ve read. I’ll be honest about why, because this fic has put so many thoughts into me that I must share them with the author.

There were times I felt unsure if you were fetishizing the incest or not – and I’m still not sure about that. That’s the reason I almost stopped, because there were moments that felt highly “fetishy”, as if the audience were supposed to be titillated by the constant mentions of their mother/son relationship.

I, personally, am highly put off by incest as a fetish, but I am fascinated by it from a psychological point of view – as in, I want to know what drives two grown adults who are related to be sexual. I bring this up, because although I was torn for hours over where I thought this fic fell, I came to this conclusion: you were NOT trying to fetishize the incest, but were depicting it through a POV character who DOES fetishize it (Madeline). If this was your intention, then it was done so well I had trouble separating the author’s intent from the character’s intent.

I feel you tackled this subject in a self-aware way. I don’t agree with the notion that it’s not porn, though. It’s definitely porn, lol. But you do porn with plot enviously well, especially here. I’m still blown away by the deliciously graphic images – that, by far, is your best strength next to great dialogue. That erotic imagery contrasted with the disgusting premise of it occurring between a mother and son left me emotionally confused in a way that will leave a mark on me for months. But I feel that the incest was intended to be viewed as disgusting, so consider that mission accomplished.

I could write a ten page essay dissecting this short story for a literature class – if it was allowed. You’ve left your audience with many things to think about for themselves and draw their own conclusions. Such as: is what Erik did considered rape, or not? Deep down, did Erik truly want to have sex with his mother, or was he just desperate enough for her approval to do anything?

I’ll probably be thinking about this fic on my deathbed at the end of the century.

Gorgeous!

This is the kind of dark and insanely twisted stuff I love in this fandom. The psychological horror from both of them was top notch.

Amazing work!

More twisted than your usual work but still quite well written. Thank you for sharing.

Hey what the FUCK Cat.