Dear flairina:

Not really the most appropriate title, is it? The Law of Economy ("Occam's razor" is a misleading name for it) states that it is superfluous to suppose that what can be accounted for by a few principles has been produced by many. Now, here, we already have the principle that people in the Miraculous universe aren't great at connecting logical dots (as happens all too often, alas, in shows that use the secret-identity trope), so the Law would actually tend to discourage the additional postulates about the akuma rules that this story's thesis entails - not just the long-term issue you mentioned (which I personally could swallow just fine), and not just the idea that there can be akuma victims who look indistinguishable from ordinary people, but, supremely, the implication that Hawkmoth could and would akumatize someone into a supervillain who at that moment was already akumatized by him into a *different* supervillain. ("Ah! Jealousy, deceit - and the desire to be a superhero! This young lady is my perfect… wait a minute.")

Understand, I don't say the premise is intrinsically a bad one, or even that you haven't successfully resolved the difficulties it entails. (Indeed, I can't very well say the latter, since I haven't yet read the second chapter.) I'm just saying that it's not a very good illustration of the story's namesake.

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

when the new version is up, can you post here? thanks

Hawkbitch is a twat, Vera seems cool, would read full-length fic.

This really could be the start of larger and very interesting and awesome fic! Poor girl doesn't even know where she is!

Yay! Marinette! Marinette!

Nice story, please give sequel...

This is a nicely done aftermath. It does close in well, and I really like the idea that Vera (yes, I saw you do that) is such a sweet person.

Aah! Just noticed there was a chapter 2. I was expecting the sequel to be a separate story. This is amazing! love that she knows so many languages- I think that's like the one thing Canon-Lila doesn't say.

XD English is tough. What does it say that I learned more about English from fantasy novels set in pun-land than from any actual teaching?

The first chapter is brilliant.
The second chapter is touching and beautiful.

I'm almost nervous to see what would happen if an amonk of Lila was created, and how i'd affect Vera.

This was a good chapter. I like this Vera person.

whoa this is so cool

Even before you put in the notes at the bottom, I knew that her true name meant "truth" (I've studied lots of Latin!). Very nice touch there!

The feud between Alix and Kim with everyone else looking on was funny!

...Although, poor Vera. Someone give that girl a hug. Maybe also dozens of macarons from Marinette's family's bakery; that ought to help too.

Still, great way of ending the story, on a high note (or at least a potential high note).

So, this is it? Not to sound ungrateful, because I'm glad you wrote more of it! Still, if you ever did write more of this, I would happily read and review!

I loved the second part! it's interesting and keeps me curious. Keep up the good work

Not as tense and exciting, but I do like the closure here. Plus, the real Lila makes perfect sense.-