Hey,
I really enjoyed your story! it is honestly- just perfect. I really do love it .Great work .
Hope you update soon .

Hello ! I read your fiction and I just wanted to tell you that it is too good ! it is one of the best i have read! Can't wait to the next chapter

Great story, it's one of my favorites,
Everything inside is great, i love the character of Jessica and her interactions with Edward. the adventures of the characters and the emerging love between Edward and Jessica as well as his friendship with the girls (Angela, Bella and Alice) and I can't sait to see the future meeting with the volturi. I have no words to describe your story I really like it and I never tired of reading it . I devoured all the chapters of your fiction.
I like your writing style and the way events are linked and I admit that I look forward to the rest.
Good luck I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Continua

i love how jessica has good actual relationships with her family, especially her brother. i hope she doesn't forget them like many other stories. though i indeed found her to be a bit immature for her age, which around she's physically 16, she would be mentally 25. other than that, i like the flow of your writing and i'm hyped to read the rest of the story.

Dementri lol I like it.

Hi, after reading your response I am taking the time to explain, especially knowing the review was deleted. I hope this message will be taken as it is meant, with no ill intentions ascribed.
That comment was meant as constructive criticism - as help to an author. That was why it was more than one sentence in length and provided examples. The story was read as a whole, because it is not fair to judge a story after one chapter (yes, of course a person bothers to read the whole story and the review when they believe in the concept and purpose of a review and the exchange of thoughts between an author and a reader). The story or author was not called bad, the author was not offended, nor attacked personally.
As an aside, you used the word "flawed" in the responses to the review in the last chapter, though, and, honestly, most stories are flawed in some way or another.

It is very sad that an honest opinion, provided with good intentions was taken personally. I know some authors want the reviews to give them a reader's opinion or constructive criticism. The review was meant to provide a different perspective. However, I understand that this was not welcome. I truly wish you all the best, I will not give my opinion on this story, as I understand that is your wish. Good luck with all your writing endeavours. Truly.

Hi, interesting couple. The relationship between Bella and Jake is really taking off. There are some mistakes with grammar or word choice, though. I think a beta reader would help with that.
For example, did you mean "distrustful glance" in this sentence?
Jake asked, holding hands with Bella, eyeing the surrounding trees with a somewhat untrustworthy glance.

Thanks for updating! The overall development with the characters is fun to read! xx

Advance congrats on your son becoming 2 in a few more months!

I am sorry to hear that happened. You’re doing great with this story! You shouldn’t have to defend why you write your character as you choose, but I understand why you are as I have done that in the past as well. Think of all the other great comments on your story though instead of that one Guest. All the best! -lalaland972

I wish I could give the thumbs up, confetti, and applause emoji on the site because those would perfectly represent this chapter, great job! Can’t wait for the next update!

I love this story. I also can't wait for your Zuko story, I'm so excited!

AHHHHHHHHHHHHH! I love this!

Great update!