okay how did two women have a daughter, this is all over the place, there is like no background, the lemons arent even that good, there is french just thrown in the first few chapters, which is actually pointless, because nobody can read it unless they know french, and in order to translate it you have to type letter by letter, evangeline is somehow a half vampire, for no reason, this should be re written and more detailed, more information, it would be better honestly, sorry i just had to get that out there

yeah not fond of tonks using a dick on evangeline

actually the greengrasses have no right to request privacy, harry is the lord, and they went seeking out a member of his house, and really they believe snapes word alone? they're supposed to be cunning and ambitious, that's just dumb

okay i cant understand french, also when did hermione get there? im lost

I like this chapter. It is a good chapter.

wow. ok it's chopped up. it need more words. it needs a full rewrite. it's like you took storyboard ideas and copy and pasted them.

you have an interesting start but ... that just about it ... hope you grow and try again. would love to read this , fully written

good

Are you just not going to translate the french at all? I think this is where I drop this story if you’re not going to translate other languages as it’s not fun to read and not know what’s going on.
Good story thus far and I wish you luck with the rest of this story.
~Ryan

I agree that McGonagall was totally useless in protecting anyone but her point scoring pet Granger.
She stood by and let students be abused by other staff and Dumbles beloved Bullying Slytherins just because he said so.
Letting little shits get away with everything doesn't lead them to eventually becoming good people, it just makes them worse as they know they can get away with anything

Please write a sequel to this story and have Harry impregnate Lily, and Tonks. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

I said shocking when it been a long while it will mean a good story like this will be abonded only one here to be trusted to finish their story is teddylonglong lol

wow this story is still alive shocking

Please write the next chapter and have Evangeline flee to France and be caught by Harry there. He should punish her by making her be his slut therefore making her pregnant with his magic. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

My one complaint about this story is Luna hasn't shown up much. I'm sure she'd love to be apart of things

What happened to ginny