This is brilliant. I was on r/narutofanfiction looking for some Evil Kurama fics and came across this gem. The slow descent of Naruto hating people, how Kurama easily manipulates Naruto. Just fantastic!

Stop with the switching timeline, it makes this an utter fucking mess to read.

...Despite how depressing this is I kinda wanna see how it ends. ... Will Kurama and Naruto become friends in this?

This story has a lot of potential. The biggest gripes when looking at the structure and flow of your story are the grammar and spelling errors that a little proofreading could easily solve. If this story is facing a translation issue that is causing these problems, that would be more understandable.

Line breaks to separate out the different points of view per character would be a great boon for you. Just rapidly jumping between viewpoints without a break of some kind denoted by a solid line, asterisk or some other marking would fill this role.

Characterization wise I love how you have shifted Naruto by small bit here and there as he has come to acknowledge his own weaknesses and started to work around the limits that have been placed upon him. Would love to see more of his antics and discoveries with sealing as that could either go in his favor, from his experimentation and success, or against him as he has skirted more regulations of the village.

Develop some of the other characters that are in the story, please. It is great to focus on a few characters in a story if there isn't that much of a world surrounding them, but you have already brought in many side characters that could go well if properly developed. The change in the relationship with Naruto and Iruka is a great example. How does the shift from a purely caring mentor to a mentor that is tied down by restrictions from helping his student change him as a character? Iruka has helped to reinvigorate his desire to be Hokage one day, work with that.

Same with the Third Hokage. Naruto has learned some great insights that have slowly changed his perspective on the Old man. How much will that distrust grow as Naruto learns more about his lineage? How will Naruto view him after realizing that he could have helped him while growing up and he didn't?

There could easily be some proper action scenes placed in here to spice things up. An action sequence can be used to not only provide tension, but show progression for your characters. Please don't shy away from them by sticking to a more emotional narrative tale as the canon series contains enough action. With your take on it, some of the gratuitous fight scenes could have more weight to them without adding a "talk no jutsu."

Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Yes yes yes!
Maybe it is because I myself am dealing with social and emotional issues this year, but I am loving this story. I love the shades of mystery and anguish in Naruto and Hinayana. And your rendition of Kurama (or Kyuubi) seems poignant and true. Please keep writing. I don’t think I’m the only one loving this story.

Will naruto go crazy? I like it

interesting.
Hope you plan naruto learn all the truth soon, about the uzumaki clan, his parents (especially kushina), the previous jinchurikis, etc.
and doesn't let konoha walk on his feet again

another excuse, konoha just doesn't want naruto learning fuinjutsu.
Really would like naruto see one of academy student legally obtain sealing art books from teacher just to prove that fuinjutsu restriction law was just made for him only.

A great update, keep up the good work.

i have read all the chapter until now.
the idea of the story is quiet good.
the naruto that you are building is very interesting.
but i believe that the story can be better and there are few things that i greatly disliked here.
what i disliked the most were the flashbacks, i believe that they must only be used to give informations about something important happened in the past.
it is if they are ysed in every 4 to 5 chapter in the story but to be used for every chapter, i find that they will destroy the development of the events in the story
i disliked also the lack of progress in naruto's skillset and mindset
it's good that you made naruto acknowledge his weaknesses, you made him do the first part but where is the second part when naruto begin to take his life as a shinobi seriously, there is an entire library to at least able him to learn the basics.
i also disliked greatly iruka and the sandaime here, they were supposed to be a suportive characters for naruto and help in his development but i feel that they are working against him.

regardless, i believe that this story has a good potential but i'll wait for more chapter to see if this story worth following or not.

good luck
EZEAKEL

A great story so far, keep up the good work.

Great

look naruto finally noticing that sealing art is not a village secret, neither an art for chunin and upper grade eyes only, but just forbidden to him and him only. if naruto spied on hinata, sakura or sasuke asking iruka for learning fuinjutsu sure he will see an happy sensei said yes and give them beginner sealing scroll.

Really enjoying this story so far. The pacing is a bit slow in terms of coming up on the end game but the way you write makes every bit of progression seem like much more. I also really enjoy the characters. All the important characters have spot on dialogue befitting their personal attribute, and emotions in the dialogues are articulated well without being in your face. Very maturely written. I like that for the most part, characters follow canon personality wise but unlike canon they aren't a caricature of themselves. Very fleshed out well rounded characters with believable motivations. Very good overall.

Keep going love the flash backs it's an interesting way to write