The trope of Shmi being the overprotective helicopter mother screaming so loud through a holo that yondus ears rings is patently absurd. if she was actually that over the top she would never allow anakin to travel with yondu in the first place. which means you making her a shrieky harpy that all men fear to cross is just an unnecessary cliche being forced into the story. Personally the caring kind soft spoken woman from the movies is a character that actually is a tragedy when she loses her son in phantom and dies in clone wars. nobody cares what happens to a shrieker.
I looked up Barloz freighters. seems like a hell of a lot of space for one yondu rescuing one yaddle. the diagram i found was 1 sqaure length3 meters which is 10ft. seriously recommend you double check the figures for the size of that ship and consider whether it actually. akes sense to the story. you could house 2 platoons of soldiers in the cargo area, maybe a whole company with all their equpment if it's a short trip. and something that big hardly makes for a good infiltration vessel. just a small 2 man fighter would work. 1 space for him, 1 for yaddle when he finds her, and he could park that more discreet places than a moderately large frieghter.
As for names, I think taking a quote from Sidious himself makes for the perfect name that embodies Yondu's philosophy in pursuit of the SithWe must move quickly, the Jedi are relentless." The Relentless! how excellent of a name for a guy that's been doggedly hunting down the order of Bane for centuries? Who made the Banites literally afraid to be on the same planet lest the dreaded yondu catch them together and finally succeed what he has nearly done several times before?
My vote for a name is the Relentless.

One further note: i was expecting yondu to bring up the first boarding of a the negotion attempt by qui-gon. He and obi-wan were there acting as the dually designated and lawful ambassadors for the Republic Senate aboard a diplomatic craft. and the Trade Federation blew up the ship, murdering the diplomatic personnel aboard, and further damning they attempted to murder ambassadors of the Senate. and worse, attempted murder of jedi. how is it that the attempted murder of diplomatic representatives of the Republic Senate is not in any way pursued? given the TF in the clone wars series showing that they are so massive that individual branches that get caught violating the company's stated neutrality get cut off, the jedi could have puched pursu legal action in the courts against Nute Gunray and his father for the attempted murder of jedi, and the attempted murder of diplomatic ambassadors of the Senate. even corrupt senators could not condone the attempted murder of ambassadors as even if they disagreed with the jedi being ambassadors, qllowing the TF to get away with blowing up a diplomatic ship and it's Senate representatives would be undermining their own authority and power, so even the corrupt would encourage the courts to seize the assets of Nut Gunrays division of the TF, to defend their own power and authority.

again with anakin overdoing it. actually trying to lead people when he has no idea where he's going. it's to much. if this was giseo I'd say the actor was overacting. as it is written word i suppose it is just the author overdoing it. it doesn't come across as 'anakin is enthusiastic'. it reads as 'anakin is stupid'.
the bit where they leave the council room is also clunky. anakin needing to look at yondu 4 times before he leaves was over the top. he literally just was instructed by yondu to go with qui-gon. so when quigon says he will take anakin to his room, why does anakin look for approval from yondu to do what yondu just told him to do?
This chapter had some interesting world building setting the tone for yondus dynamic with yoda and the council as well as hashing out a bit more of what makes yondu stand apart. however overall this chapter felt a little rough.

even the ineraction with dooku doesn't make sense. anakin being a curious about dooku, even maybe wanting to know more about him so he could live up to a former pupil that his master clearly holds in high regards, that would make sense. an immediate storm of overwhelming envy? why? with as long as he has been with his master, where could these abandonment issues come from? as young as he is, you established that he barely, BARELY remembers a time before yondu, therefore he doesn't remember being a slave. and what titanicly close bond could he have had before yondu showed up that was severed that he could remember? you have completely rewritten anakin's experiences, even being a slave at best is barely remembered, and as he grows even those few recollections will inevitably be forgotton as all toddler memories are. anakin might morally despise slavery from observing it in their travels, but tbat visceral first hand experience doesn't exist for him in this story.
I'm massively enjoying this story, i was waiting a long time for confirmation that the MC was another of yodas species. my guess was the MC took yaddles place. the brother angle was a delicious twist out of left field.
I think my biggest gripe is that you fundamentally and monumentally changed anakin's life experiences, but didn't convey those changes in believable alterations to his personality. people are shaped by their experiences and how they view and interact with the world comes from that. you don't seem to have taken that into account here. further, anakin is far to over the top with energy. it doesn't make sense that being especially force sensitive makes him a naruto clone of stamina. his body is still that of a baseline human pre pubescent or barely started pubescent child. running an obstacle course made for adult soldiers is beyond credulity. it's basically saying a 12 year old could run marine corps log steps and jump walls made to challenge adult warriors. anakin at this stage should be squarely in the 'fuckload of potential' stage. not out doing. adults.

your portrayal of anakin feels like a parody. the mannerisms are to over the top. barging into the council alone is so far beyond the scope of reason it sunders the suspension of disbelief completely, detracting from the story.

I think it more than likely the science is advanced enough for them to have some types of cocktails to curb the excess hormones raging through the bodies of teenagers. And meditation probably takes care of another part of it. And it wouldn't surprise me Jedi are required to know biology so that would mostly take care of The Talk, I think.

Good chapter

Good chapter

Good chapter

Good chapter please update

I'll watch this.

I'd probably call the ship an old bitch for it's rusty nature. :P
But if you want something how about 'The Amaterasu', name after the Japanese goddess of the same name.

"His shock at my sudden impersonation of a missile..." LOVE this line. :)

Also! Yes! MC/SI is the big (lol) brother of Yoda! :D

Interesting story! I know that most people like the Force being more magic/mystic/cosmic related, but couldn't the MC have used the Midi-chlorians counter stuff to at least prove that Tenebrous and Plagueis were Force-Sensitive? This would perhaps make his relationship with the authorities not be so bad as you described, right?

I...I don’t even know. They all seemed to know what it is, so I’m guessing they treated the whole thing like biology class in the most clinical way. Then they would proceed to tell them to drown out the hormones with the Force like every other strong emotion.

I am also curious about just how exactly Yondu managed to give that dude his final rest now. Like, toss it out the airlock on a collision course for a star?

I liked the conversation with Anakin, and it definitely stays true to character. Shmi is going to ream him a new one however. Good chapter, looking forward to seeing where this arc goes.