Here’s my review: You need to work on capitalisation, other then that I didn’t find anything wrong with the grammar. The story is good, a nice change from everything else out there. All in all, it’s almost perfect. If you fixed up the capitalisation then it would be completely perfect.

it has potential please right more when you can

I went into this expecting Twigo to just obliterate everyone since he’s super cool, and I left it genuinely wanting a longer story for Twigo he was killed off pretty darn quick and I liked his character, they couldve even brought him back in the melascula arc, in other words uh, this is great and I need more

Fucking amazing