Not a bad start, too bad that this story was not completed.

Ginny should have died instead of Hermione.. I can't see how she would be in any way helpful other than causing problems with her temper. Hermione could have at least understood the time period and be able to hold her ire back at the blatent sexism but Ginny isn't known for her rational decision making ability. I don't see her being any more useful than she was in the books.

I have really enjoyed the story that has been posted so far. I look forward to reading more as it is posted.

So the South have finally heard about the British. Should prove to be an interesting read when they start to interact more with one another. Wonder how the British will react to the king. Will they do anything about him when they figure out how mad he truly is? Anyways interesting story so far, thoroughly enjoyed the read. Hope you get around to updating again soon.

Are there going to be little even babies to?

The elves can help do almost all the cooking, cleaning, and most of the organization at the moment.

Is Lunas husband in this?

Are they going to wars their Keep while their repairing it? Nothing over the top since its technically a trading port except inside the walls but at least anti lift, maybe anti violence, ect...

Since they have more then one family and a butt load over gold they shouldve asked for all 3.

since you decided to have them bring "winged horses" with them, why did you invent a species instead of one of the ones already seen in Harry Potter? to be specific, Threstals and Abraxans.

Espero que a partir de aquí varias cosas cambien con respecto a la historia de GoT, creo que poner de una vez a Cersei casada con el príncipe seria lo ideal, y que Robert muriera o fuera sacado de la ecuación.
Otra cosa a tratar seria con quien debe casarse Net en el futuro.

your writing ia pretty bad but you get he point across.

there are however many points of your plot that are just plain wrong.
making contact with house mormont without first looking at a map.
buying land at such a price while most of the north is empty.
displaying magic for all and sundry.
using mortel to build with rocks and then fire to make it 'smooth' why not throw the rock on a pile and transfigure the tower.
their castle could be a statement of magic but now it is just enough to function without any great feats.
accepting a maester, even the best one would still be lacking compaired to their knowledge and has only use for the ravens. but any slytherin would see them for the spies they are.
the gifts to the other lords, give them communication mirrors and you have no need for the ravens
moat caitlin is not connected to the east coast by water.
their funding also makes no sense they should have just pulled all their money then give each family 20k and the rest is for the state. unless you are saying the weasleys suddenly got rich?

so to sum it up gryffindor forward and fuck the rest. i think wizards have a lot to learn from muggles but in talking about 21st century muggles not these barbarians that are barely better then animals.

you taking away their magic to cause harm and anything else of use is far to ambigious. you can mold the entire story by just saying oh no that is also not possible. a shield charm may protect but anything that takes away momentum does aswell.

i also wonder why no one ever creates a magical train across the north. now that would be good buisness. a broom flies just use that enchantment then link it to the ground over a stone road and you havr a maglev train.

Firstly, please stop with present tense, rewrite for past tense, it is far superior for story telling.

Secondly, why bother writing a Harry Potter story of you don’t want magic in it? You have already made the characters far from canon which is understandable enough given the circumstances, however, at this point you have almost no link to the HP world in its magic nor its characters.

I can’t comment on the plot as I haven’t read far enough to know where you are going and given the above reasons I will not be.

Me encanta espero el capítulo 7

Interesting story so far. Please update soon.

Hola me encanta espero el siguiente capitulo

please more

a bad twist to an already good fanfic story you badly stole