This is going amazingly well. Cant wait for them to get out of the hotel and back to Pallet Town though. Mewtwo in a domestic setting should be amusing.

good and touching chapter.
So look mewtwo made a vow to make ash dream come to fruitation

2 down, 4 to go

I have never read a more cynical and self-hating Mewtwo! However, that's all part of the charm. This fic's narration is excellent, if a little dense at times (which makes sense, Mewtwo is incredibly smart). Keep it up!

He's already calling Delia 'mom'

So Metang's Australian? Neat.

Well. I rather like Elizabeth.

And she's a Devon...

hes a bloomin brit

Ouch, making a story up as you go. That can be incredibly awkward - when I was younger I got myself into a bunch of odd dead ends because of it. It was an educational experience, but it didn't make for good writing.

That being said, your technical writing is pretty good. Little to no grammar mistakes, the writing is pretty clear.

And the story starts to have a very clear context, which is another good thing Ash has a given role, Mewtwo has a given role, and so does Delia. And the world isn't black or white - it is distinctly grey.

good chapter.
Trouble always follow ash, and mewtwo finally has a taste of it.
Like ash will train mewtwo for battle, hope you plan mewtwo train ash to not be too reckless or hotheaded and at least think a plan before running to death situation.

A pseudo legendary that is basically the scariest out of all of them if taken to their logical conclusion.

A Metang? I'd say that's game-breaking but Ash already has Mewtwo, so...

Zekrom might want to blast this city with lightning.

i LOVE this, and i really enjoy how you write 1st pov! i can almost feel like im where Mewtwo is at, its awesome! totally looking forward to more!

i really like this mewtwo and ash relationship.

Love their interaction, this is great.