I was worried about this did being abandoned but seeing that it was updated the 15th I was jumping in joy, yipika-yey

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So...

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...Will this one get smutty like Yagami does? Have a focus on Grayfia? Such and such?

This is ass

Can please bring Lucy back somehow? So she and Natsu can be together again.

Well the changes are cool tho not all of them especially having Mira and Erza be with another guys instead of Natsu and that you made Natsu look exactly like his older brother Ignia.
But aside I prefer this serious and hurt Natsu instead of the extremely horny one from the original story..

So is Natsu the Dream or he just joined Great Red side against Ophis?
Time to know how Natsu will deal with the battleships outside of his Kingdom if they want a fight they will find death and destruction.

Since you got permission from the original author, I guess it's fine. but this story is not for me. firstly, Natsu has a lot of attachment issues with Lucy and second, Jellal. the most corniest piece of crap of a romance that could come on an anime century.

btw, it's your choice so you go on continuing the goodwork.

The inspiration was quite obvious to see, yet you've changed enough small details that it isnt just a copy (Different members) , keep up the work

good story so far, however what puts me off somewhat is the apparent lack of the old Natsu.
I understand where you are coming from however. Nobody could live for that long and remain unchanged.
I have a personal request though...please have Erza or Mira beat the crap out of the fallen Angel's and the more arrogant Devils before or during Natsu's visit to the underworld...

if this is going to be anything like the original then i can't wait to see how it unfoulds

Wait... so Natsu is the Dream?

Or is he not the Dream?

I don't understand.

continua

Wow, just, wow. Did you really just write a different story over another? Disappointing.

I'm glad you picked it up. I really like the premise of this story back then.

This looks promising start. Keep it going.

Wow... aren't you that guy who wrote that sephiron something story? where you dedicated a single chapter to call out shashfan then proceed to call him names and stuff? why'd you change your story? why'd you change your name? look at these reviews man... and you gave a shoutout to YagamiNguyen in chapter 1. Just like how you gave a shoutout to SlashFan on chapter 1 in that sephiron story just to flame and diss him on chapter 4... atleast face the fact that you did all of that instead of deleting everything to save face.