So Harry is punished for saving a girl from Assault? And the punishment is the same Malfoy got for said case of assault? Are you stupid?

I think this illusion arc that's been going on lasted too long. I mean, it's gone on for over 1/4 of the current story, and it feels like not a lot has really happened. It seems that all it's accomplished is giving Astoria a hint at who's after them and maybe helped Daphne and Ron's relationship.

I am willing to trust your judgement as the writer, but I'm also glad to move on from that part of the story, since I've been enjoying most of the rest of it.

Okay, I'm enjoying this story so far, but one thing about this chapter is bugging me. How did Malfoy's foul even work?
I get that he was blocking Harry on one side, and they were approaching a tower. But why couldn't Harry turn in the other direction? Was there a wall there that wasn't mentioned? And even if so, why couldn't he turn up or down? Or if nothing else, why not just slow down? Sure, slowing down would probably give Malfoy an advantage, but not as big of one as hitting the tower did. It just seems like you're thinking too two dimensionally for a three dimensional game.

But I also have trouble visualizing things in my head, so maybe I'm missing something.

I love the fluffy romance between Astoria and Harry - this pairing is too rare. Even if it happens, it's usually in GoF or OotP, when Harry feels abandoned. I've never seen it done in the third year.

The plot with Greengrasses as yakuza was also new. However, while the mystery and a hidden psycho are interesting, I feel that they take too much of space and take away from cutenes of Harry's and Astoria's relationship.

I can honestly say that you already succeeded in making something different from other fanfics. Can't wait for the next chapter - maybe Dumbledore for the first time won't be useless and will help in catching the stalker (making Dumbledore a competent adult, you would avoid a major cliche *hint* *hint*)

Well that right there was amazing and eye opening.

WTF, this has got to be the most confusing story I have ever come across! Not sure how much longer I will be sticking around, though my curiosity is peaked so we’ll see.

Change you genre to drama and crime there is very little friendship in all 10 chapters

interesting Awaiting more.

original story, enjoyed the read so far.

Just stumbled across this story. Good read. Please keep posting.

This punishment seems enormous considering the usual punishments for these sorts of incidents. I am not even sure Harry got this much when he and Malfoy destroyed that bathroom in sixth year and he nearly killed Draco with Snape's spell. Way to go Astoria.

way too many exclamation marks!

Well done that right there was very interesting to have read. Nice job.

interesting and original story!
Impatient for next chapters

Yep, not even making it past the first chapter here. A story where Harry actually feels he should be ashamed of upsetting Snape, and a Draco who's competent enough to be more than an annoyance. Way too much suspension of disbelief for me to have any interest in continuing,