I hope you aren’t about to bull some bs and make Artemis jealous of Percy and (I assume Calypso?). Same goes for Orion. That dirty rapist no good bastard shouldn’t show up in this story, I hope.

Yep something new!
A nice idea and your writing is awesome.
I hope I can’t boost your update schedule Or at least your ego :)
It’s truly awesome and the interactions are pretty good.
Maybe a bit ooc but they’re al pretty young so that’s no problem
See u hopefully soon
Yesse

I remember really liking this story and leaving a positive review. For some reason, it wasn’t favorited nor was I following it. Thankfully, I found it again and remedied the situation.

Another great chapter! Strong grammar, though you sometimes use present conditional (can) instead of past conditional (could) at times.

The last paragraph has me anticipating about what’s next! On the one hand, he could have simply blacked out. On the other hand, because of how you wrote it, it almost seems like he died.

Either way, excited to see what’s next!

Perfect and update soon please

I love the idea for the story, I can't wait to see where you go with it.

it was a very interesting chapter i seriously can't wait for the next one and keep up the good work

Maybe hunt down a legendary creature, since she is the god of hunting, but Apollo is semi known for that. I'd say you could have her kill an evil tyrant and save a kingdom or city, what have you. She was known for having a strong sense of justice. Not to mention the whole evil male thing. Would be even better if the evil tyrant was a woman. That would be some irony. Nice work

Percy didn't die right? For the looks of things, he just lost consciousness.
You could make Artemis defeat the Nemea Lion? Just a thought.
Percy defeating Ares will be ironic and funny.
Percy and Artemis relationship better improve before they reach Olympus, or else Zeus will become an even bigger problem.

Artemis could prove herself by hunting Teumessian down. It could be a reason why she gained the domain of the hunt.

Aww, that was adorable. So much fluff, with just the right amount of bitterness from Percy holding himself back from telling her his feelings.

I can see this going in two ways: 1) His feelings grow stronger and he has to leave since it would be too painful to stay with her without telling her; 2) His feelings DO fade but then Artemis develops feelings for him that make their relationship more difficult or at least change the dynamic. Well, I guess these are just scenarios with more conflict. There’s always the no conflict route with both of them developing feelings and steadily moving into a mutual relationship.

I'd think that Artemis likely wouldn't have "tanned Greek skin". For one, red hair of all shades fares better the lighter the skin tone, purely in terms of appearance, and also fairer skin was as a whole more desirable in women of ancients times and even in men where a slight tan was desirable so you looked like someone who worked hard, you wouldn't want a noticeable enough tan that it would look "slavish". But also I'd assume that most of the time she'd spend outdoors would be in woods and forests where there is very little light. Tans really start coming in when you're living in more open areas, like farmlands. They're hunters, they probably not only survive off the woods, they live in the woods.

Also, if Percy removed his tunic to patch up Artemis, he'd probably not only be shirtless, but nude as a whole. The tunic was really worn on its own without any sort of under-wear. In fact tunics were probably the actual underwear in most cases. For example the Romans would wear tunics as underwear to wear beneath a toga. Pants also didn't exist in Ancient Europe so there is no two parts to what Percy would wear - he'd only have his tunic.

Amazing .. Just amazing

Good chapter, the only complaint is to have Artemis remain more cannon or cliche for her bow, she'll attack Percy for a little than burst into tears. For the future don't have Percy be a lap dog to Artemis and don't put emphasis on the protection of woman it seems to happen in every Guardian Percy story.

Iiiiiiim loving it, excellent work and start. Somehow I knew he was gonna snap that bow... foreshadowing Haha

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