Please update this story is so good

Interesting start

Absolutely horrible in nearly every aspect

Good start. I’m not a fan of present tense but that’s just me. It’ll be interesting to find out what happens next. Thx.

I have a couple of issues, and a piece of advice.

1) The first person POV is a little jarring. It's not a good style for you, traditionally it's used to give a greater insight into each character's thought processes and such. Their motivations, reasoning, and feelings. Your method of storytelling (which is more of a series of events than the in-depth character study first person is best for) is better suited to third person narration. I honestly think it would improve the flow a lot.

2) In first person POV, it's best to label the change in character as you did, but in third person it's best to simply narrate your way through the change.

For example. "His resolve set, Harry pulled his pocket knife from a pocket and readied it to cut himself one last time"

"Tonks was sitting in a tree outside, wrapped in an invisibility cloak, to get a better vantage point over the neighbourhood when she heard the pained shout come from Harry's bedroom."

You had all the neccessary info being narrated anyway, so if you changed the order up a little and throw in a little more detail you'd go from a passable first person POV to a very good third person POV.

3) A pocket knife used presumably diagonally across the chest like that would not do that much damage. The style of knife that likely is, is designed for stabbing not slashing. Knives like that are often designed to have sharp points but not have particularly sharp edges. There are many types of course, and some do have very good cutting edges, but assuming this is a folding knife since Harry had it in his pocket, then it's unless it's a tactical folding knife it's probably designed for opening letters and slicing fruit, not for self-defence. It would have an edge and would break skin, but it wouldn't do much damage without a fair bit of pressure behind it. And the angle Harry must have used it makes that sort of pressure impossible.

It's short blade also means that while it would do some damage the way Harry used it, that is not a viable method of comitting suicide. It is also a very difficult wound to self inflict, just think of that angle. It would have been more believable if he stabbed himself with it or slit his wrists. Also, losing consciousness, unless you faint at the sight of blood, is a lot more gradual than that.

I can't believe I'm discussing the mechanics of suicide. Fuck my life.

The next chapter will be interesting. Presumably, since even Dobby performing magic at Privet Drive got Harry an underage magic caution, Harry is about to get a letter informing him he's been expelled for using a Bombarda.

If not, you should explain why. That's the golden rule of storytelling - A therefore B because C. You have to draw a line of causation between events. A causes B. Think about what's just happened, and what the likely next action is for every character who knows about it.

Anyway, enough advice and constructive criticism. It's nice to see another Harry/Tonks story on here. They're my favourite pairing. I look forward to reading future chapters, whether or not you take my advice.

May the Muse be with you,