Good Chapter.

I suggest you not to follow cannon so closely. You are making the same mistake many Self Insert author have done before you, try and derail the story from cannon at least a little bit. Like Freed for example, you could have killed him right there instead of making a scene and making him get away, I suggest killing at least a few bed guys before their scheduled death.

Nice work I look forward to more

Hey dude. You're off with a good start. I can't wait to see how you play this out.

Interesting story.

so quick update. I just fixed the text for the talking so it's now "talking" and 'thoughts'.

Oh god, that -'words' instead of "words" is so confusing! Usually one uses the classic "." when they are describing a character speaking and '.' when they are thinking

Thank you.
Lines of spoken dialogue should be more pronounced. I wish you would switch single quotations marks and double quotations marks. I use a highlighting extension in my web browser to mark where a line of dialogue begins and ends. So using single quotations marks would make it difficult to read as the same character is used as an apostrophe.
Please keep up the good work.

Thanks

This is a very gd story i love the idea of edith it kinda reminds me of the one time i was reincarnated as a slime its a great anime i surgest that u give it a watch if u havnt seen it already it might give you a few ideas have u decided who you are adding to isseis harem yet anyhoo looking forward to the next chapter keep up with the great work

My dear Edith, you are one of the last creations of the Great Tony Stark.

good chapter