I’m speechless. With such an inane yet simple idea, you took my expectations and went to Mars. You basically exceeded in every aspect!

This story—no, fantasy–took off amazingly. Such a small concept, but you took on the ride and played with my emotions. It might seem like another ‘cringe’ fairytale to haters, but the idea fits. Perfectly. I loved Count Formal and Katie’s personalities in this fic, in particular.

You sir, ma’am, person, have a knack for writing. So continue to do so.

Bravo! You have written another superb Gate story. Thank you!

Was the desert air force base a reference to Stargate? Are you planning on a SG/Gate crossover?

can you make a sequel for this story,because that would be great. Also, technically speaking, another Gate can be open, when the Gate closed Itamy was still able to come back to Japan.

Bravo magnificent ending of this story my friend, goes to one of my favorite Gate fanfics i have ever red. XD

And so it ends. Very interesting story once again. I eagerly await whatever you do next, in this fandom or another. Thank you for writing

your stories make me happy, nice way to be entertained and to just forget about outside things.

I feel like I might need Ethan on my apocalypse survival team, he makes mistakes but he seems to be pretty tough for a kid. He adapts well to the threats he's facing.

Even though it's just an amusement park, the thought comes back to the matter that the Magic Kingdom is defined prominently with the Disney Castle. Like a castle, there's typically only one way in and out for security reasons. But that also doubles as something like an animal pen, with those inside trapped by those from the outside. That duality can be applied to Disney World in this case given Ethan's concerns about trying to escape into the Florida marshlands. Kind of feels like a lesson from Attack on Titan as well to be honest.

The SEALs didn't even try to intervene. Kind of wished you threw in a little bit of character contemplation of Walsh mulling over whether to blow his team's cover to help get the kids to safety or protecting them from the troops on Tom Sawyer Island on their tail. It would have been interesting to see them making a cost-benefit judgment on the fly on whether to help some kids that helped them earlier at the cost of potentially blowing their cover.

That hammer Colt is feeling is probably the clock approaching midnight. :P

"It wouldn't matter. They have guns and know how to use them." I feel like this is a trope or reference of some kind.

A smartphone might have helped a little bit in convincing the Saderan officers' council what they were up against. Or maybe not. Actually, that's an interesting consideration, if the option was made available, could the Saderans have considered negotiations?

Helm's pissed off, just another day at the office.

Ufufufufu, that’s what they get for being so aggressive
They could have negotiated a peace, instead they shot the golden goose and got nothing, now knowing that magic exists and unable to do anything about it
All’s well that ends well

Me gusto mucho pero para ser honeste pensé que continuaría como en el anime.

You know, on the topic of ditching equipment, with the SEALs entering through the waterways along the Park's north end, I get this feeling that they could probably leave their gear in some neat little corner and not worry about it. Disney World has to be among the cleanest combat theaters to be in ever, it's already the strangest.

"Sleap" should be "Sleep"

Missed a chance a few chapters ago maybe to talk about light pollution. "We can't see the stars!"

"Kaite" should be "Katie", the mistake occurs twice I think.

"busses" should be "buses"

Also, this chapter gave me more reasons to like Katie. In an impossible position with an even more impossible choice, she rose to the occasion. I like that.

Curious, wonder what the Coast Guard or the Navy besides the SEALs bring to the table in being in Disney World? This chapter does really well at integrating exposition and fun facts into its dialogue; very smooth, especially regarding the suggested eventuality of the Gate affecting Disney.

I like the lowkey-ness of the chapter, that the befuddlement has mostly passed and the acceptance that the world is going to be different and they'll figure out the hard decisions when they get there. It's a good juxtaposition to the characterization of Sky Full of Fire and Starlight.

Funny how the Imagineer and the Captain are talking about gunfire and fireworks in the same scenario. It's a morbid thought for a place synonymous with all things innocent and wonderful but appropriate for the situation. Great chapter.

Very well done. Excellent conclusion!
You nicely wrapped up the main plot and all the little threads, yet left room for more in the future if you desire (the whole ‘my brother dnd half the senate wish to seek revenge’ thing)
Of course, this just makes me wonder what would happen if the Gate opened up in a less populated area, say the American Midwest, or the African savanna. If the Empire was given a chance to establish a foothold prior to detection, how would that play out?

Okay, this was definitely one of the best Gate invasion fics I've ever read. As I stated before, the premise feels very unique to the whole genre, and it turns what was a military fantasy into a fantasy thriller that is a, as you put it, reverse isekai into a fake isekai.

What binds the whole story together and turns it from unique into great were the characters. Your characters here were really well developed and got me emotionally invested in them quite heavily. I actually felt quite depressed about Lyla's death, and that doesn't occur easily for me. And speaking of this story's characters, I'm actually quite curious about what Katie will do with that Amulet of Elange in her possession. She doesn't seem like the type who would sell it, or even give it up to a research institute. Based on her thoughts though, I wonder if she'll use it to communicate more effectively to guests who don't speak English?

All in all, great job on this story, and I eagerly wait to see what you will decide to write next.

well nice ending. it was a very different approach of GATE, but it was still nice

Awesome!