While I enjoy your story and it is very well written...
You need to work on timing and the constants flashbacks and jumping around a lot issue.

It gets annoying and confusing since 75% of your sotry is back to back flashbacks and it's turning down a lot of readers.

thanks for your works

bring it back

first chapter shows he failed and is dying then the second chapter is basicly a flashback.

why would anyone want to read a story with a plot that they know is going to fail.

a plot that big from the entity can only be the gods, any of them would benifit from it. no other entity can survive for 8000 years, just look at the nights watch that guards against the end of the world yet has forgotten its purpose

I hate stories that have the future as the prologue, way to ruin all the suspense but at least now I can move on to other stories. I wish you luck with your future tales.

ah.. i see what you did here..
so you want to make story with this kind of flow..
i cant say i like it.. but i do not hate it either..
ahahaha..
my motivation to read is back now..
ahahaha..

using future story as prologue is always bad in my opinion..
this is because not only it is spoiling future story..
it also make the flow of the story weird..
atleast thats what i feel..
well.. my motivation to read this story is almost gone now..

Start at th end garbage take a big moment and throw it out with no reason to care about anyone in the story way to go

awesome story!

This is a most queer mix of HP and asoiaf fandoms, taking frankly ludicrous amounts of liberty with the later's magic. It should be gross, unfounded. Yet you somehow manage to make it work...

This is one of the most interesting game of thrones stories. Keep it up! I love how mc is willing to do anything to improve his dynasties power he isn't some weakling pushover and I love the explanation about magic and why valyrians practice incest.

so the self insert who is a normal guy with no prior knowledge when he came to this world became a genius with fighting and magic a new concept to him and he some how planned all of this from birth and his oast wife is even smarter then him is with him and their basterd kids get knighted at the age of 11 and one of them is a girl who cant be knighted then thay get legitimized then he made an army and no one says anything about it and the power he has is from his bloodline if that is the case aegon shouldnt even be able to to conquer the seven kingdoms the first men fought and beat the the wight walkers at their peak so hard they needed 800 years to recover the wight walkers at their peak invaded all the world simultaneously and where winning for hundreds of years and it took the entire world to beat them that is in an age where dragon where as common as horses and giant and other creatures like them where a common thing

Oofsh. I feel bad for your SI. You're shipping them with Rhaena "I Actually Like Your Sister" Targaryen.

Originally I was hesitant to read this, the time period was something I didn't know I'd like.

Glad I gave it a shot.

Luckily I caught up to a non-cliffy stopping point.

Looking forward to further installments.

On the idea of technology stopping the hoarding of power. There is business. If you get a monopoly on stuff that is power. If you can cut off food that is power. You can be pretty powerful in an advancing society. Look at China.