Nearly finished the whole fanfic (until the next chapter) and it’s felt like I was reading a movie

This is surprisingly very cute. I'm just gonna wait for more.

If Siegfried got Dreadking Rathalos armor, maybe Eris can get the new Frostfang Barioth? :-P

Sometimes you’ll use the same word twice within a short span. Like “It tried to escape. ‘Don’t let it escape!” or “edge of the area, which… border of the area.” I’d try to avoid that ( is great. :-P)

Sometimes your word choice is a little out of sync with the mood of the scene. Like, you’ll have a life and death battle then say “it was none to happy about…” Also sometimes you’ll have like side note explanations that disrupts the flow.

I liked the Redhelm fight. It felt faster paced, which a fight probably should be. And a little more technical, the way the bear acted based on the current situation (blocks with arms, falls back to crush Felyne).

Nice touch with the Rathalos having learned from its experience. Makes total sense. Buildup and fear was good too.
The skulls were a nice touch, helped drive home that people had already been killed, and the stakes.
Rathian was a surprise, thought she might be a Deviant too, but it seems not.

I love the idea if the Dreadking rathalos knowing Eris is there and using brains

The introduction of the sweetheart was unsettling, good job there. Maybe a bit odd that G rank hunters are so terrified though.

It has been a while since I last read a story that I really enjoyed, and more surprisingly from the Monster Hunter fandom no less. Maybe it is just me but I find it difficult to really sit down and read stories from this archive, maybe it is due to the fact that a Monster Hunter story will feature O.C. no matter what, and to me O.C. stories are very hit and miss with me. This story being one of those O.C. stories that from the moment I read was like a breath of fresh air and I was instantly hooked.

I think it is due to how fun the story is. Not every story needs to be a grand adventure about saving the world or anything, and you do a very well job of establishing both Siegfried and Eris as players in a much larger world. You still keep the focus on the two main characters while making sure you properly flesh out other side characters that never feel like they out stay their welcome. All in all I think that hot and cold nature that Siegfried and Eris have is great and I love how they interact with one another.

I'm looking forward for the next chapter. Best of luck and I hope to see more soon!

The improvement over the original is nothing short of impressive. Keep it up!

Geez, that was indeed a long one, what was the word count?
Noticed a few more past-present slips, gotta watch out for that.
Luck seems to bail the heroes out of trouble just as much as it gets them into it.
Enjoying Edmond's route, curious how it'll all be tied together.

I like the flashback sequence and how it's cut short, clever.
And yay, he's back.
I think there were a couple more tense slips.

Nice. Very nice. Really, really nice.

Story needs longer chapters and more monster hunting. Enough with the human vs human action.

Heh, good choice with the music, I can picture the scene in my head.
Sometimes with action scenes (fighting, dancing, just lots of movement), you don’t have to describe every detail. You can be a little general and vague and let the reader imagine it.
Actually kind of bummed about Edmond.

That was a really good cliffhanger