That was genuinely entertaining. I was a little worried at first as it seemed off to a slow start, but several chapters in the story hit its stride. Enjoyed this version of the Harry Daphne romance. It was an interesting take on things. Enjoyed both Daphne and Harry's characterization. Harry finally got something or the other along the lines of normal, while Daphne makes for a very multidimensional character, being healer, lady of the manor, amongst other things. Enjoyed the development of Pansy as Harry's girl Friday. That bit with the Bergs was entertaining. It was rather funny to see Daphne and Narcissa escape so easily. Hope you'll re-visit it one day for some additional story telling.

What a triumph of imagination and skillful writing. One on the best fan fiction stories I have ever read. Thank you so much.

The ending was a trifle tame, but the story was imaginative and enjoyable. Well written, with very few mistakes. I preferred the Wheels trilogy, but nevertheless a good piece of work.

There was far, far too much focus on the whole clusterfuck that was Romilda's married life and what came after. This story is relatively short, and it feels like a decently large majority of the focus of this story went to that drama. Drama that neither Harry nor Daphne had any real personal interest in, outside of dealing with the ones stupid enough to try visiting violence upon them.

In a story where the focus is supposed to be the romance between Harry and Daphne, it was strange and not particularly interesting. The whole thing really just gives off the feel of a bunch of trashy hicks freaking out because reality doesn't match their delusions.

Then you have Pansy and Morag becoming lesbians and having their own lines of drama that equally had nothing to do with Harry or Daphne beyond Harry being the impetus of them getting in contact. This one would have been fine, were it not for the crap with Romilda already polluting everything.

As for Daphne herself, I am a fan of the character (in theory, since she barely exists in canon), but this story became increasingly full of weirdly self-indulging toxic "feminism" in the sense that Wizards kept being portrayed as foolish and incompetent and the idea that Witches are needed for anything to get done because only they are special and smart enough to do it was present to some extent. Some people really like that nonsense. They think it's cute or funny or something. I think it's very irritating and... what's that buzz word? Ah, yes. "problematic". Because it invites a future systemic problem that would grow like rot until suddenly these cute little "jokes" are taken as fact by people unable to engage in critical thinking. And that's just unhealthy for everyone involved.

I'd say the first half of the story, Romilda bullshit aside, was about a 7/10 as far as fan fiction goes. The latter half was more of a 4 or 5/10 because of how increasingly annoying everything became and the return of yet more Romilda-related bullshit. In canon, Romilda was just a trashy girl who was super thirsty for Harry anyway. She started at a low place and kind of went lower because the stakes are increased outside of school and she dragged Pansy, Harry, and eventually Harry's wife Daphne into danger.

The amount of annoying stereotypes in this story seem to be growing, or at least are becoming more noticeable.

"I have bad handwriting because I'm a boy"
"Girls saying sexist things is acceptable because they are girls"
"Women always know best and need to be pampered. Men totally don't also have needs."

It's sounding more and more like Harry is completely giving up any real control and responsibility as family head to Daphne and now Narcissa. Even though they keep secrets from him, because apparently he treats it like girls being cute and pal-ing around.

It's interesting how Harry is "accidentally the Lord" and all that. You keep painting him as virtually an outsider in his own family. But Daphne, the actual outsider who married into it, is supposed to be super in-tune with everything to do with Potter and Black and is the perfect wife in control of everything while Harry plays at being a landlord and small business owner. It feels like, before long, he'd end up completely emasculated while Daphne does anything and everything she wants with the family's name and administration because she "knows better" than him and starts to figure his input is "nice to have but unnecessary".

Nice to see that their marriage is already becoming a jumbled mess of bullshit and secrets, largely because you decided witches need to have secrets at all times from wizards.

They've only just married and Daphne is already accusing Harry of spying on her, while she goes around dictating his life down to what he's allowed to eat. And, naturally, she's got her little secret where Narcissa is basically her minion now because she's "Lady Black". As if Harry wouldn't be the ultimate authority as Lord Black, but let's ignore that in favor of "just witch things".

You know, the longer this story goes on, the more instances there is of Daphne and other witches just talking about Harry like he's not even there or if he were some kind of pet whose input was unimportant. This entire little adventure seemed to be more about Daphne and Narcissa having a good time and out-clever-ing everyone while Harry sat around confused as the muscle.

It undermines the personality he's been given up until this point. He's very much supposed to be in control of his surroundings, yet he's been behaving like he'd be completely lost without Daphne. Hell, his entire contribution to this scenario was delivering a wand (his own wand at that) for Daphne to use, then he accompanied one of the enemies back to their base while Daphne and Narcissa had a nice time wandering around said base in secret. Then Harry proceeded to do nothing as the girls joined up with him and basically controlled the entire situation from that point on.

You don't do that to your spouse. Talking about them like that is extremely rude and demeaning.

It's more of that "Witches are so special. Wizards are just kind of there" nonsense where you keep making the witches collude to keep secrets and act like wizards are incapable of understanding anything.

As far as my opinion goes, this entire little adventure feels like a huge disappointment because basically nothing happened and Harry was basically unnecessary in the entire thing. He was just a name to give Daphne and Narcissa more clout in the face of these imbred idiots so they could act like clever little princesses who dictate how the would-be kidnapping should end and be interpreted.

Even afterward, there was no discussion about what happened. The witches had themselves a fun little time, and Harry is just there in the wind, back home like a good little husband while Mama Daphne goes back to work saving people. And Narcissa goes back to being Lucius's boring trophy wife for the time being. Harry's greatest duty is reporting what happened to his glorified secretary/assistant.

Were I the one writing this event, Narcissa would have been there entirely only as support/additional numbers while Harry and Daphne handle their family business, i.e. dealing with the kidnapping. As Lord and husband, Harry should have done more to make sure this wouldn't happened again. Is it not his duty to protect his family as the husband? As the lord of several fancy names and other titles? He went from potentially murderous to doing nothing aside from casting some small illusions and stealing an owl. I mean, it's already clear that these imbred mountain people aren't of one mind and will likely keep causing trouble one way or another.

Call me sensitive, but I find it irritating that this being (who I have some ideas about) keeps calling Harry "Wizard" while speaking to Daphne in a far more familiar fashion. Strikes me as rather condescending, which I do not appreciate.

It starts leaning towards a certain kind of sexism, especially when paired with the whole "witches are ever so special and wizards are to just sit and wait until they are needed" vibe being built elsewhere in the story.

At least it's not as bad as that one awful story where there's an elaborate conspiracy of witches keeping wizards weaker than them (because wizards are naturally stronger) and so they forced the world into being matriarchal by constantly undermining and sabotaging the men until they thought their "weakness" was normal. And those too strong to be contained were cast as dark lords to turn everyone against them.

There was also something about female attuned wands being part of the conspiracy to keep male magic from seeing its full potential. There was some gross humors stuff going on with bile and poo to make the various wands. I think the Elder Wand turned out to be special mostly in that it was a male wand in a society where male wands were super illegal, taboo, and generally speaking a secret because it's not like the witches in charge advertised "we are forcing you to buy girl wands so you'll be a weak bitch we can easily control with our bullshit coven stuff." Oh and old witches apparently glowed. The writer kept trying to lean into the idea that witches and wizards weren't exactly as human as they were made out to be in canon. Though, mostly just the witches because wizards were nerfed hard for generations by that point.

I never finished that one. The gender vs. gender stuff got way too ridiculous and melodramatic.

It's a shame that Lucius is alive. Any excuse for a Harry/Daphne marriage with Narcissa as "secret" mistress that Daphne tolerates because she could be useful (well, assuming she's got a brain and isn't a useless trophy wife type) would be very amusing to me.

That, and I've always had a strange interest in Narcissa and her sisters. Especially after they get widowed, or potentially stolen from their husbands. Or some time travel shenanigans. Different flavors.

Unfortunately, it's looking like anything between them in this story would probably end up being a very bad thing due to their complicated relations and Lucius being alive.

Best fic I've read in a Long, long time!

Points off on your otherwise glorious tale. I abhor 'movie crap', the stuff that isn't in the books and some idiot director took liberties with. Smoke travel is one of those. Nowhere in ANY book, did anyone go from one place to another, even while dueling, by turning into smoke first.

Yeah, but why a lamb gotta' be black?! Huh?!
(Sorry, just my inner, bad, comedian coming out)

Whoah! Someone got into the 'special' mushrooms.

Wow! Must be a pretty big Beatles fan to say 'the white album' over Space flight, landing on the moon, even a Boeing 747!
I, personally, am not. STONES- all the way! How (!) does a double album, four sides, only have one- what I would call a good song- "Revolution", and the single "Hey Jude" which is internationally acclaimed (even if I could give a crap). "Back in the USSR- I'll give an honorable mention, but still, three songs?!
I'm just not the 'strum strum, hippie, predecessor to the Boy bands', type.
I was fifteen and at a Valentine's dance when someone ran in and said John Lennon was killed. Dance pretty much over. Night pretty much ruined. Girls crying. One wanted to kill herself. I knew the Beatles. but not the individuals beyond McCartney, 'cuz my sister had a 'Wings' album I liked. Cable, and therefore MTV, had not come to my one stop light town, yet. Hell, I still had a black and white console that played albums, back then, and AM radio in dad's car. (1979)
A few months before that, when my much more well off, older cousin got "Some Girls" by the Stones, and a new stereo for Xmas, I thought "this is the greatest band EVER"

oops cant finish... gotta run