Ok... I’m gonna copy a youtuber from Game Theory for this little rant...

Dear TheAnimeFanThoerist25...

It’s me KAAAAAATOOOOO

And ohhh boy do I have some things to say...

First off... Ultra Instincts doesn’t increase your strength, it in fact only gives you a last ditch energy boost, enough to push your body to keep going, as well as increasing your dodging abilities and your flexibility. But in the Dragonball Super Universe survival saga or better known as the T.O.P., it has been proven a fact that UI weakens your physical power... tho Mastered UI losses this drawback to an extent, you are clearly using Bad Omen UI as Izuku’s base quirk, and as the story goes he’ll gain the MUI mode, which I respect, most people who give other characters UI give them MUI right off the back, but... *deep breaths...* sure this is FanFiction and you can change how abilities work but in my opinion, authors should never extremely change an ability, what you did was make UI basically like Goku using Super Saiyan, or at least at this stage, the Great Ape transformation, which is kinda overpowered.

Now, not to say you didn’t do a good job but you could’ve done a better job, either by having Izuku’s quirk being MUI or actually use how Bad Omen UI is, not perfect, weakens your strength, used in desperation, and can hurt you if used for to long, and as the story goes remove some of the weaknesses until it only is the hurting yourself if used for to long weakness.

My next rant... Momo... god damnit I am gonna have a hard time reading this with this character use! I mean COME ON! Sir Nighteye(cannon) would’ve introduced Mirio to Dad Might and more than likely he would’ve got OFA.

JUST TELL ME... HOW! how in the hell did All Might met and got impressed by Momo enough to give her that quirk!? It’s so unlikely it’s even less likely than Mineta getting OFA! Not even joking here

All of that I think I could be ok with overall... if it wasn’t for the fact that the cannon scene with All Might noticing the obvious connections between himself and Deku... in this world that shouldn’t of happened, and you wanna know why?!

This didn’t happen! *shows a clip*

All Might: Eat this!

Izuku: Huh?

Toshinori: IF YOU WANT MY POWER YOU HAVE TO SWALLOW MY DNA ITS HOW IT WORKS

Izuku: this isn’t what I was expecting

Toshinori: EAT EAT EAT!

Izuku: AHHHH!

*pauses clip* because Izuku and Toshinori doesn’t have the same predecessor/successor relationship, THIS *shows screenshots of the comparison scene in the English Sub version* SHOULDNT EXIST!

Sincerely

Kato!

Before I read this story I have to say this, there are a few other characters you could have had Dad Might give OFA to, there’s the first obvi, Bakugou, due to him being the “Vegeta” of the group, then Todoroki, just based off Quirks alone... then there’s the leader of the Big Three himself(the Super Smash Bro’s faced wall haxs quirk guy).

I honestly don’t see how All Might would’ve met and gave OFA to Momo of all people, maybe Ochako but not Momo... other than that rant, I will read and hopefully this story is better then I am thinking

Use beta readers and grammarly, do not rushed grammars as you please because it is making it harder for the reader to understand the story.

need MORE! (say it with the ultra instinct roar)

yaaaaaaaay

OH GOD, YOU'RE NOT DEAD
WELCOME BACK FROM THE 4TH DIMENSION

I would like to point out that you do not need to capitalize every word of a sentence, just the first word.

umm not to be rude but why is momo in second place when she has 44 more points then bakugo

i agree fully with the previous statement

I have just a suggestion. You're writing a fanfic. So why don't you make the ship different than canon? We get to see izuocha fluff moments in anime. Not with other characters. You can make a poll and decide which ship will you write, just don't do a yaoi.