Which region will u have ash go to next the ones I'm interested in seeing most is either hoenn or Kanto Kanto where ash ends up with misty melody Giselle duplica or even Erika Sabrina or leaf hoenn may Shauna (there's an episode from the Pokemon advance series featuring a girl named Shauna not just the one from Kalos) Flannery Roxanne (hoenn rock type gym leader) and Winona (fortress city flying type gym leader I added her because she's a girl who's very rarely ever paired with ash and they have very few stories where they are paired up together so that's why I added her)

Which region will u have ash go to next the ones I'm interested in seeing most is either hoenn or Kanto

Any new fics coming out? Hoenn maybe?

No new fics?

I'll admit I was a little bit disappointed that this wasn't a harem ending but your logic is sound enough for me. and honestly I would love to see a sequel of how Ash is fairing as a father, his friends(ie other companions etc) reaction to it. the bits of interaction he'd have with Brock(while not married he did raise his siblings for a long time), taking useful advice on things and having random encounters with the other girls n all that. But this story was really good, I really liked how Dawn confessed but it was odd(a little funny too.) how Cynthia was a bystander the first half of the chapter. pitching in only when needed to. makes it feel like she wasn't there for most of the time and her presence didn't impact the outcome. I feel like that could have improved a bit but overall a great fanfic

If possible can the next region ash Gose be the glair region since its new and for the girls that ash can be paired with are Gloria (female protagonist from Pokemon sword and shield) Marnie nessa(water type gym leader) koharu(she's the female character who's in the Pokemon gen 8 anime and seen in some episodes I added her because she's new and never been paired with ash before same with these other girls to there all new) and Bea(fighting type gym leader in Pokemon sword) if u want my opinion in How u could make the story work use some of the ideas from the Pokemon sword and shield games along with some of the gen 8 anime series I know it's brand new but I know you can come up with great ideas just like u done with the stories such as vacation heat the sequel to that story where ash encounters their mothers and finally this one if u were able to come up with great and interesting ideas for them I know u can do it when ash eventually Gose to the glair region to meet them I know there's hoenn johto unova johto and Kanto left to do but I think it be fun seeing ash go to the glair region next since its new and I know there's plenty of readers who want to see a story where ash is paired with Bea nessa Marnie Gloria and koharu since there isn't any yet at least from what I know I just wanted to say this before I forget and awesome story I really enjoyed it great job and keep up the good work

This was entertaining. It was indeed a funny read, unrealistic (which is fine as you said, its fiction), nevertheless fun to read. The scenario that Ash found himself in was absolutely ridiculously, which made it hilarious. The constant, "what are you doing?" & "why are you doing this" confused me. Like is he really that dense? And the "I didn't mean for this to happen" XD lol

I can understand the first time, since Dawn initiated it, but with Zoey? He definitely started that. He had no excuse for the rest, but I guess you can say he didn't have strong will power. Dawn shouldn't be mad though, because she hadn't admitted at the time that she had feeling for Ash, so he was a free man.

That being said, there were still many issues with the writing that no one seemed to point out (not gonna get into grammar and spelling because that would require too much explaining. But you did very good with spelling. It was clean and easy to read.)

The manner in which you write, is much too redundant. Your vocabulary is very narrow and needs to be broaden. You overuse words to many times (I know because I've guilty of this). I can't even count how many times you wrote the word 'curious', but it was surely way over 100 times in the span of the 4 chapters of this fanfic. This a difficult skill to learn for some and requires alot of reading and research to master. Look up common words used to help you. Smirk, smile, and grin to name a few are frequently used, along with 'he said' and 'she said'. Those should only be used to establish who is speaking at first, but after that, things should be switched up. You did do pretty well in this though. Sometimes the dialog of a character speaks for itself, depending on the situation you describe.

I'll leave you with these two thing. If you end up using synonyms to change up your words, make sure it matches the context of a sentence. I run into these problems all the time.

The last thing would be to split these chapters up into more. Over 65,000 words can be it's own full blown story! Like 20 chapter! or at least 15. I found it incredibly difficult to finish because it dragged on. You want to give readers a 'checkpoint' before they decide if they want to continue reading, right?

Anyways, I hope that it helps you think and do research to improve your writing, because you do have alot of potential man. Do not take this as a person attack because trust me, I would love for people to point these things out in my writing. I recently found out on my overuse with the word 'smirk' and I was horrified lol

I'll be keeping an eye on your work )

Arc 2 please?

This entire story can be composed into five words:

‘What the FUCK is this?!’

If u plan to do a story where ash travels to the glair region have the girls be Marnie (the girl who has a cheerleader squad called team yell) Bea(the fighting type gym leader) nessa(water type gym leader) and the one new girl who is a child hood friend of go in the new Pokemon gen 8 anime series I don't remember her name but she was seen in the first two episodes of the gen 8 Pokemon anime series and there also new and never been paired with ash yet

Muy buena la orgía 7w7

Awesome chapter great job and keep up the good work and look forward to the future Pokemon stories u make look forward to reading them

God damnit, please stop ending stories after 4 chapters. Really wanted more.

Awesome story and chapter it's nice seeing ash start having a family of his own even though it wasn't originally planned but they loved him enough to go through with it especially dawn I'll say ash has a way of attracting girls even though he doesn't expect it to happen he's a lucky person to have more than one girl falling for him the question is when the next story dose come which region will ash travel to next that's what I'm curious about will it be hoenn Kanto johto unova or even return to Aloha region again

What about during the Alola League business?