I LOVE IT! ADD MORE PLEASE!

its all right just needs to be a bit longer! (mabye you shood get like a yorgi diary that would be interestin)

I like what you're tryin' to do here. Although, advice is necessary. You need to watch the movie and listen to Xander's POSSIBLE vocabulary. "bugger" and what was the other one? Anyway, you get the point. Don't try to curse to cover up for his way of speech. Remember, he didn't curse that much in the movie. Plus, you are just recapping what happened. You need to take us into the psyche of Xander Cage. A diary is INTIMATE DEEP thoughts that no one else should now, not a script. Besides that, I like your idea of going into detail where the movie didn't. Keep trying! Constructive criticism helps alot trust!

I LIKE it!

Don't know x would use 'bloody' and 'bugger'; I normally wince at Americanisms but he IS a Yank.