In one of these chapters, you asked us to figure out where Nicolas Flamel's power came from. Here goes. The vials on his hip are metal vials. Nicolas is a Mistborn from Scadriel. He also has at least fifty Breaths, which explains the color changes around him. The chainmail is actually Shardplate and his sword is a Shardblade. It's possible that his Shardblade has Breath in it, in a similar way to Nightblood. Is there any I missed?
P.S. Good job noticing how aluminum dampens powers in the Cosmere. For those of you who don't know what I mean, here's an example. In Mistborn, wearing aluminum makes you immune to Emotional Allomancy. If you don't know what that means, get the book. I highly suggest it.

You guys have no subtlety in your writing. You take whole swaths of lore and world mechanics fro other writers and shove them piecemeal into the potterverse wile making a haphazard effort to meld them into a buildable realm. It's convoluted and confusing. Especially when you introduce new characters whole, as though we, as readers, should already know who they are. I get it, you're keeping to your own plot and timeline, but it's just lazy writing...

This was so well written and I loved it. The Daphne ending seemed sort of borrowed from Vin's ending in Mistborn but the rest was excellent. I've only read the First trilogy of Mistborn and The Way of Kings (and that was back before Words of Radiance came out) so at times the Cosmere elements were a bit above my head but you guys did a great job of explaining it without it feeling like a rehash of Sanderson. I would absolutely love a Harry and Gabrielle travels the cosmere sequel.

Thanks

This piece worked really well if the aim was to use it to set up a story, it certainly left me wanting to read more. I'm not sure what the idea was about the lightning looking like a woman (even for a second or less) but I struggled to envision it. Perhaps you could adapt that slightly to make it slightly easier to imagine. I hope this is useful, good luck in the competition.

The start sounds great, very mysterious!

The title said help and I'm glad to be able to give beta ! "if the metal were compounded or alloyed" the use of were feels weird but maybe that's just a rule I don't understand. Otherwise I really enjoyed it ! Lots of things mentioned and a lot of mystery surrounding the whole thing, I like it ! Seems futuristic but has also boats on water, it's feels like Treasure Planet ! Good luck guys for the competition, I hope you win ! After all the amazing stories you've been sharing with us, I think you deserve it !

Also what's that GoT story you've mentioned ? I'm still deep in that fandom and if it's Jonerys or Robbaery I'm fucking in !

Huh? It's well written but I will need more to decide if I like it.

Your plots are complicated and I appreciate that. But here's a personal peeve of mine to consider. Weak plots require women to sacrifice themselves and die, setting up the male hero, with a cost paid and a score to settle, to triumph. Keeping Ginny alive would not have been cheap, a hero survives. You just couldn't come up with a badass means for her to triumph. Women rarely are allowed to triumph because this patriarchal society we live in makes it feel weird and unnatural for women to overpower adversaries. I thought you two were better than this.

This is crazy complex. Well done and interesting. Thank you

Very enjoyable wonderful imagination to create what you have done. Thank you.

TWT not Harry but Ginny nice

I love you writing and look forward to more.

wow love this take but ginny so weak sucks

This series is difficult to understand without knowing about the Cosmere series. As I didn't, it was kind of inscrutable. Nonetheless, I read through, as it did have some interesting concepts. As far as world-building goes, if you did it justice, the cosmere world seems kind of... limited. At least it's unique. I don't believe I will be reading Brandon Sanderson's works.

For what it is, though, it's pretty well written, and I can kind of see where you were going with it, limited, of course, by my unfamiliarity with the canon you borrowed from.

I will choose to believe the "world leader" you considered offing in your story was that of North Korea.