Hey, Northern Goshawk!
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So I only just found this story, and I couldn't stop reading. I regret not reading this earlier. The way you write your characters is mind-blowing. Keep up the good work!

Happy 20th chapter! You write Jesse's fear really well. I love your take on the whole Ender/water thing for torture! Again, the way you write all the characters is well done; excited for more!

Congratulations on the voice acting; that sounds super fun!

oop sorry I'm a bit late on this chpt.. but I LOVE the way this chapter, in particular, was done; keep up the good work! I think you write the characters really well, but Hadrian in particular stuck out to me this time. Good job!

Oops! Forgot to mention a suggestive solution in my last comment. Maybe use more strong verbs in place of -ly adverbs. Sorry; have a great day/night! Did I mention that this story is amazing?

I like this one!
/ nO. jEsSe sToP! CoMe bAcK! Petra, Jesse needs another smack! BuT hArDeR!
/ Um, one suggestion for your writing though. You tend to use a LOT of the same -ly adverbs in accompaniment with your verbs, and it gets repetitive and choppy. I understand that it's good to be descriptive, but try not to force it.
But that's it! Have a fantastic time existing on this mortal plane!

Ah! So sorry for cursing, I won’t curse from now ! Milo is here, Isa and Jesse are safe, the whole town is in danger, and hopefully nobody IMPORTANT dies! :D I hop you, you, AND you are having a wonderful day/night and remember to get good sleep, even if it’s just a nap. (Sorry if this review is a little wonky, I’m not feeling too well but the chapter caught my eye because I’m in love with this story)

DAMN- Aiden I’m so sorry maya is dead(did we already know that? Cause if we did I’m triple sorry) but that is not excuse to belittle the man and possibly kill the founder AND maybe Jesse(because well. Flashbacks I think) and I hope YOU (you-the author) is having a lovely day/night and remember to drink water and take breaks!

I really love this so far.

I think Aiden's behavior fits. I love to see your grasp on how different events affect different characters' development.

It might just be me, but your writing seems to have really improved since the beginning of this story. Yay!

Ooooh, it's back! :D

Yes! Isa trusts them! And yes yes I see you’ve taken a breather once again, that’s perfectly fine and I hope you are having a wonderful day/night!

How about Lukas for the author-character thingy? Merry Christmas! Thank you for sharing your story with us!

The pacing in this chapter is really well done! Yes, I think an author and character convo would be an interesting interlude.

I see you took my advice.. well this chapter was amazing! A character-author interaction seems interesting, maybe Lukas if you were to do it. Have a fantastic day/night! (And yes I’m VERY interested in this)

Hello! I just love this story, it’s very interesting and I can tell you put a lot into it. I just want to remind you to take your time and don’t push yourself to punch out chapters too fast