Okay, so I'm going to post my review here, for chapter 2, and make it just one for both chapters because this chapter is very short (but no less powerful).

I loved all your characters, but Lily and James (as always) hold a special place in my heart. Really, their banter in chapter 1 was amazing and felt very realistic and so THEM that I could COMPLETELY see them having that conversation. (But at some point, it felt confusing because there were a lot of lines when you didn't say who was speaking, and so I believed it was Lily when in fact it was James.) I loved how you gave all your characters background, with information on them from before the timeline of the fic. Now don't get me wrong, I really do hope we'll get to see more of, for example, Alice and Lily's friendship in the future chapters, or more Marauder things, because to be honest, all that information you gave about the Marauders and Frank and Alice felt a little like an info-dump. But well, seeing as Lily had been gone for so long, I think it was kind of essential to establish those bases, so you're forgiven! XD

Now, onto the "romantic" side of the fic! I really liked how you had them breaking up because of their career expectations, it was realistic and kind of tragic, when you know that at least Lily (and probably James too, from what we know for now) missed him so very much. But well, sometimes you have to do what you think is right and in that case, that was it for them, so I forgive them!

Now onto that second short chapter... My heart kind of broke for Severus, and now I'm left waiting and wondering... What the hell did he do?! Was he actually with Lily and did something like in canon, insult her, or was it something far worse? Well, anyway, my heart broke for him and I WANT TO KNOW MORE! You did an excellent job, in both chapters (because now I need to see James and Lily's date too), at establishing a kind of suspense, so thank you for that!

I'll wait as long as it takes for the next chapter, but for now, know that your fic looks very, very promising! :)

Interesting

Really great 1st chapter! Love the tension you've built with their interactions and thoughts. Can't wait to see more!

Oh, now I need to know what happened here and at what time this happens in regard to the first chapter.

And I love the way you show Lily moving past Snape, by having her block his emails. It is simple but powerful. She doesn't wait for an apology, she is just past that.

Oh this is sweet
I want more
I like how you string together those images and ideas that let use see how they have to seek and struggle with their own thought and feelings at times