well I hope Blu and Jewel find a way to get out without being spotted

Blu was apparently right, they were being recorded. I hope Jewel teaches her to fly and that Blu finds out what's going on.
Do not stop writing
Atte: Jaqui

Ooh this is interesting, and a bit suspenseful at this point. Can't wait for more! (Well I technically can but shush)

It was nice that Blu and Jewel spent a moment alone, I hope that blu enters the ventilation center and finds out what is happening

I invite you to read my stories and do not stop writing.

Atte: Jaqui

It seems that Tulio, Linda and Fernando found a clue to find Blu. This search becomes interesting.

Atte: Jaqui

Glad you're back, can't wait to see more!
Okay, so the concept is very intriguing. This is the first time I've seen anyone do a story where Blu and Jewel are sold off, so points for originality. I like the fact that Jewel takes a liking to the place, while Blu wants to be free. (a reversal of their desires in the original movie) I am intrigued to see how this plays out. Them being contained in a fake jungle for insidious purposes reminds me of Honeymoon, by Corration.
Except Honeymoon is a rather disturbing story at the end, with the reveal behind the purpose of the place, and Jewel, Salvia, and Dinah getting raped by 3 birds... Yeah, its really disturbing.

A criticism I have is the grammar, but it is a lot better than your older stories, and its still readable. I do excuse you, as English isn't your first language. If I tried to speak Polish, it'll probably be way worse than this.

A tool I'd highly recommend is some sort of grammar checker. Grammarly is very helpful, even though I don't use it. I use a grammar software that comes with Microsoft Word. (the programme I use) Either would serve wonders for the grammar. Because your stories have good concepts, and so if the grammar was excellent, then the stories would be great.
But as it stands, this story is still tied with Broken Heart as your best story so far.
Hopefully this helps you out in improving further. No matter how good you are, always strive to improve and become the best author you can!

Sincerely,
Proffesor Ass Spiders

Well, Blu needs to learn to fly or he’s stuck

Pretty good story thusfar! I think the concept is quite interesting, and I do like the execution. I hope next chapter comes out soon.

Oh no, no, I don't want to see them hurt!

well now they've got to find Blu and Jewel

Well wonder what Jewel wants to show Blu

I can't believe Blu finds a vent hole. I hope Blue learns to fly with Jewel's help

Glad to see one more post from you my friend

greetings and take care and don't stop writing

Atte: Jaqui XD

gran historia amigo pero no dejo de pensar para que el viejo queria jugar con Tulio y que clase de experimento le quieren hacer a Blu y Perla. Gran historia
Dicho esto. Nos vemos

4 hours ago they played Tulio and the old man because he wanted to play the old man with Tulio, I still wonder

I was surprised to see that Tulio beat the old man after losing more than 15 times.

I hope that the role you gave Tulio and Linda helps you find Blu and Jewel. I wish you a happy new year and don't stop writing.

Atte:Jaqui :)

Why did the old man want to talk to Tulio to play a board game with him? it's very weird but interesting

I hope that blu and jewel can escape from ahy and I mention you in one of my publications I hope you can see it

Do not stop writing

Atte:Jaqui