Cocky shit

Man this story is such a fun read! I like that while there dark moments there is enough humor to keep from being overwhelming. I can't wait to see how this story goes and honestly Fate is such a B! I mean seriously I can get her punishing Death for her choosing a champion but to go so far as also punish the souls with a treatment as that she is provide a minimal Death is just horrible. I wonder what will happen when/if Harry finds out. I hope you are able to update soon!

Amazing story so far. I love your take on the characters and the little TMNT reference you had Neville throw out. Can't wait to see where you take this from here. Thanks for sharing

Marvelous story! Can't wait for the next chapter.

This is too much Marty Stu, I can't read this.

The interactions between people is overdone. The reactions are too extreme, it's ooc and unrealistic.

That was a lot of clichés. I'm impressed you managed to fit them all in one chapter.

For now I couldn't read past the halfway point of the first chapter. You made Ginny and Ron way too competent, Harry and Hermione on the other hand way too incompetent. I mean, are you seriously trying to make me believe that Ron is competent enough to successfully cast Imperio, that Hermione is too weakwilled to resist it when Harrys life depends on it, that she can cast a successful Avada Kedavra without the intend behind it, and that Harry Potter just rolls with all of this without doing some super powerful plot armor wandless/accidential magic to turn the situation around!? The idea of all of it is too absurd...

I'm very much not impressed with Lily. Bitch. I hope Harry does everything he can to disappoint her further.

xxxxx Kudos xxxxx : )

Omg it's 7am in California and I haven't been to bed yet. I absolutely love this story and can't wait for the rest of it. I love the idea of the aspects being Angels, great work.

Good chapter. Thanks for writing. W.

Love the story, but the constant use of using the phrase brother in everything but blood and every iteration of that is redundant. We know they have a brother/sister relationship, you dont have to shove it down our throats.

more, more, I want the next chapter

Nice chapter, despite Neville's grandmother's attitude. I was surprised about how Walburga was dealt with. I was kind of expecting her to have not counted on basilisk venom in the blade. Or maybe Hestia burning the wall down so the portrait could just be buried (or tossed into one of the deepest parts of one of the oceans) somewhere at least a mile underground. Soooo, none of Fate's children have made the obvious Harry/Beatrice possible relationship connection?