good story cool idea better write also rip you laptop

get a beta

nothin less is a banger so six likes hip-hop wonder if he likes shady

the idea of making 6 a ODST is some thing i welcome and the story is good the best parts are chapter 2 & 5 because they explore Sixs past of a basterd kid growing alone for most of his friends like Cam or Hayden and i will like to learn more about Six but there are lot of mistakes and i think that you should get a beta writer to help you

TLDR good story but there are mistakes

Bro please make more

can we get more of the jorge going after lincoln thing like why would the unsc want a 16 year old?

Did he just fire a .45 ACP bullet through an elite’s shields AND armor? Is that honestly supposed to be believable?

And then he insults it by calling it a “casual” which might just be the most childish thing I’ve ever seen.

I'm going to guess that he is Lincoln Clay and somehow was able to stay alive from 1963 to the present day?

You should really have more about the plot in your story description. You wrote that you downgraded Noble Six to an ODST, but that doesn’t tell us another plot.

You also need to figure out punctuation and capitalization. A lot of words that should be capitalized, are not.
At the beginning of the chapter, you don’t use any quotation marks. In the middle, you do use them for a while, but then near the end, you use colons instead, which looks really stupid.
Overall, way too many mistakes for it to be worth reading.

Does six have moljnir armor or odst armor or the crap armor they usually give Spartan 3s