God fucking damn it its so fuckin good i love it

i am SO MAD i didnt read this soober. like, I saw the art on tumblr at the time of the big bang, SO WHY DIDNT I SEE THE STORY?! ARGH. I am so sorry I suck at reading things , but please try not to doubt yourseld because this was some stellar writing that I fully enjoyed ever second too! you grab emotion and detail so well!

Wow... Loved It!

Hey, it's Hazel here to check out your fic! First, let me say your beginning paragraphs were so mesmerizing. We often only have a few paragraphs to reel the reader in if they make it past our summaries, and boy did you deliver! I strive to obtain this level of description that flows so easily one day!

One thing that caught my attention is that your beautiful writing during Natsu's inner monologue to me sounds too sophisticated for him. Funny issue to notice huh? If there were no names of characters, I would have guessed this was maybe Zeref's monologue. Our sweetheart is much more simpler and doesn't think in such grand abstract ways. Not saying he wouldn't mull over his thoughts for Lucy. I believe he would, just not with such grandiose terms and with more physical responses to his thoughts.

HOWEVER, as we get to the end where there is more dialogue between Natsu and Lucy, I think he's perfect there. You're excellent at painting emotions and this was quite beautiful! Keep up the great work!

I loveeee it, I haven't read something so detail on Natsu's feelings, and I've gotta say is very good and Refreshing. I like your writing style a lot.
I would love to read a continuation, no pressure thought.

Girl... damn this is fucking awesome. I really love this. so good written.ω

Great story! Watching Lucy dance around the fire with tribal natives, seems to awaken Natsu's feelings & awareness of how Lucy means so much to him in his life. :)

Damn isn’t this well written and well thought out. I love it!

I loved it was so full of all kinds of emotions. So beautiful I am speechless.

Great story. I love the way Lucy danced.