please update this story is really great it explore the powers of percy and their change in another world to a different level and ti rly nice to read !

I dunno, man. 100k words and 21 chapters, and it really doesn't feel like the story has moved that far. It's like most of your content has been focused around setting up various action scenes so you could have your MC "righteously" do cool shit and kill people, without having him just come off as a killer, which honestly seems like would have just been the better move at this point. Sure, it explored some various aspects of the Ironborn.. but it spent so long on it, and didn't really move the story forward at the same time. This scene with Balon dying and Asha taking over could have easily happened by like chapter 4-6 without even feeling too rushed. I'd definitely advise you to focus more on advancing the plot in the future, and to try not to force these action scenes too hard, at the cost of your character(s).

As for your MC, he feels a little flip-floppy. At one point he's clever, and then he's the dumbest motherfucker on the planet. Then he's merciful, then vicious to the extreme. Seemingly in control of the world, and then being literally possessed by various beings unable to fight back. He's just straight up become unlikable after all that, and that's coming from a guy who /really/ enjoyed the beginning of your story, this character included.

Still, thanks for posting, and good luck with your future writing.

So now he won't even let the man die because it goes against his own "morals"? "It's not the kind of man I am."?

Honestly, you started the story off really well, but these past chapters have just been one trainwreck after another. Really sad to see. Completely lost respect for your main character.

So instead of doing what he obviously had to do from the start.. he had to leave on a magical journey so all of his men could be killed and he could finally attack "righteously"? Sounds like a moron to me.

He blatantly goes against Balon's rules. He returns. Balon obviously kills his men and sends him on some bogus "mission" away from his people... and he... actually... goes...

What in the fuck? Are you just sending him off to create some disaster and force a stupid plot point? There have been some iffy moments, but having the MC act like this makes him feel like a completely submissive moron. Godlike my ass.

"For a crannogman's coracle, mayhaps..."
Nice.

Cool story so far. I don't know much about Percy Jackson, but the atmosphere and general characters and their interactions regarding the Ironborn makes for a very interesting read. You're a strong storyteller.

Love this story. Definitely a good read. It's peaked my interest in Percy Jackson fanfiction. I like the Perseus Lodos arc, seems like it's going to be fun to read. I do despair over the fact that the story has stopped updating right when we reched the mainland. This chapter was a godsend. Asha did get blindsided like a bitch.
Hope we see more of this story.

Hell yeah about fucking time I'd say. I love that you're merging the two worlds instead of just Percy randomly teleporting somewhere. It's glad to see him taking action. The underlying (overlying?) cruelty in the ironborn was displayed rather well. The events feel very natural and I'm glad to see the three eyed raven in the text as well, makes sense. This has been my first Percy Jackson fanfic and it's actually pretty good to read.

Okay this has been pretty fun to read so far. Balon has always been an asshole so I'm not surprised at him doing asshole things. Let's see where this goes. So far the writing has been pretty great.

Oh man. It's like possession and transformation are doing a crazy fusion dance over Percy. Hopefully he'll be able to get help.

THANK YOU FOR WRITING!

awesome fic! i read this on spacebattles, so i know there's another chapter you haven't posted yet on ffn - i'll be following it here lmao, i have no idea how sb works! amazing worldbuilding!

love this story!

Please update your story

Just finished reading this. A great story overall. Your take, of what I assume Percy slowly becoming a God, is a most refreshing one and the best of this kind I've read. A well-paced descent into madness and rise to divinity.