Interesting that Sirden backwards is similar to “denser” XD

yes bad joke i know leave me alone

Another good chapter, mate. I have come too expect nothing less from you. Hope everything works out for ya irl.

I honestly love to read your story, it helps me keep going with the one I am helping working on right now! Hope your having a great day, and stay safe!

Amazing chapter! It was certainly worth the wait : )

Galia’s point of view was amazing to see! Her confusion and uncertainty of Amy is quite nice to see. I just love how Galia thinks, she is quite the bit tricky. Ooh, Ficcio, quite the nice MInccino, and a bit of comedy. The build up to Arzon on the bridge is really well done ,it builds up quite a bit of tension. A Zoroark, interesting, I can see the changes quite a bit from the old version. “Fiends” hmm. I do wonder what experiment Sirden is running.

What investigation could Arzon have? Ridanian security, over Amy of all things? Very intriguing. But now to Amy’s point of view and best fluffy boy Fury. A nice homey wood cabin that would look great in the woods. Tension rising, pacing and worry, both eeveelutions are a bit nervous, while Amy looks like a scared cat. Uncoil the spring and you have a bit of laughter between the two.

Amy is quite the bit perceptive, picking up on details, and Fury is quite sweet. So Arzon is a bit curious on how things turned out. Oh, Auristead and Ridan are in two different kingdoms, separated by a stream, neighboring each other. Fury seems to be worried about something outside, but Amy does ask a good question, why the hate between Gallia and Arzon.

Huh, typing, something that … simple. It sorta makes sense, but I have to agree with Amy, it feels stupid (not narratively, this is a entertaining story.) A case of prejudice, little surprising to see in Pokemon, but interesting! Ah, so dark types have quite a bit of a bad history, but I am willing to wager that other types have similar tales.

OH, the firing of an ember of what is probably Arzon’s son, a Zorua. Hiding in plan sight, but no one can shake the feeling of being watched. Going from happy to absolute worry, Fury is precious. Poor fella is worried about charring the window.

Amy being in complete of the Pokemon world is still great to see, a human who sees these feats as something impossible. Ah, Zolkir, hmm, Amy’s forehead gem? Maybe the reflection of Zolkir showed up in the gem? I love Fury, he is such an adorable fella. The little smoke poof is so great.

Poor fury, so adorkable that words jumble out of him like word salad. Seems that Amy and Fury were used as bait to see if Zolkir was spying on the town. Amy is probably gonna have a lot to say, a whole lot.

Huh, so after the caravan makes it stop in town and leaves, Amy and her egg are to be turned over to Arzon? Hmm. Arzon seems pretty keen on threatening on using military force, but is he bluffing or telling the truth of his actions. Pfft, seems Zolkir needs to work on his sneaking. Plenty of tension in the scene as , at least give fury a little bit of credit! Hmm, I do wonder what part of the conversation we missed out on while at Amy’s perspective.

Trivia :
Oh, now that is rather interesting, even more antagonistic you say? And originally a horrid ending, wowza. I do wonder what that could have been.

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And here we have another chapter! I saw one mistake, in the last scene, starting with "he's so close now", there is an instance of " Zoroark" being spelled "Zooroark". This occurs very early in this scene.

Oh, and 'Zolkir'? I wonder where I heard that name before, hmmm.

Anyway, I'll be waiting for the next chapter. I wish you and your family the best of luck!

Nice chapter. Hope everything works out well. I would love to see what happens next, and will wIt patiently.

Amazing chapter! You did great with this one!

Quite the different introduction to Tiran, trying to get lucky. Seems that Amy's maternal instincts are starting to show and the scene with Tiran was really well done, a nice chat. A lucky Espeon gem, not sure if that is ironic for Amy. Sirden and Tiran probably know each other quite well if they have a bit of routine. Fury is such a worrywart.

Amy is quite worried and protective of her egg. Amaranth's eastern coast, and a coastal village, nice. The walk to the cabin really shows off the Merri village and all the little details of it. huh, only a mile or so away from the sea.

The reaction to telekinesis was great! Nice description of the food. Gallia and Sirden really were made for each other. Yep, the mascot of Pokemon, pPkachu. Gallia becoming angry, that is scary. Azurview city, the capital of Auristead, interesting. Oh, so fire types are not allowed in the Grand archives? Ah, possibly plead with the king to learn what happened to Amy, that sounds dangerous.

I do wonder how Pokemon would react to learning that Amy was human. Ah, Arzon, I am guessing he is a dark or a poison type due to all the type talk, not to mention rude sounding. This may get ugly due to Amy and Fury having to hide in the cabin. Fury is the purest cinnamon bun.

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Woo! New chapter! And some very coincidental timing,just recently I was considering sending a PM to see if everything was going well, though judging by the author's note, things were not going well.

Anyway, it's nice to see things diverge from the original so much as the original, for lack of a better word, was bland in some aspects.

It was nice to see fluid reactions and dialogues between characters. Though I don't think the original was falling behind in that regard, I do believe that the original's characters were pretty empty (much like my own characters I've created, though I do say yours were better).

Now time for mistakes, though I only saw one.

When Tiran met Amy and begged her not to tell his mother about his injury, he said this: "Oh no! Please don"t tell my Ma!" In "Don't" the apostrophe is instead a quote.

Thank you for writing another chapter!

I didn't read the original version of this story, but for whatever reason I find this story adorable. And I love your spin on the tired trope of a random human being pulled into a Pokemon-only world.

I like this story better, it's more refined.

I find that this chapter 3 is neither better nor worse than its previous incarnation... simply different. better in some ways, yes, but it's a different storyline so comparing the two is like comparing a chicken egg with an ostrich egg... both flightless avians, but not of the same size nor species.

Loving the story so far. I’ve been here since the discontinued version, though I suppose it hasn’t been too long. (Paused to check the published date.) Has it really been almost half a year? Ah, but time passes when you’re not paying attention, I suppose. In any case, just thought I’d take a moment to point out the errors I spotted.
Firstly, there appears to be a sentence which either wasn’t finished or that you just missed the punctuation before moving on to the next paragraph. It is located just after Sirden returns from checking to make sure Tiran truly has left: “He let out a grunt”. There is another a bit after Sirden suggests Amy go outside for breakfast. “He spoke slowly, more pensively”.
Secondly, there is a potentially unnecessary “that” as Amy and Sirden prepare to leave. “… back into the same basket that it had been first presented…” Further, the line break just after appears to be a bit different than the line break earlier in the chapter, with a thicker line after the first when compared to the other.
Next, there appears to be a typo, unless I am misreading the sentence. You may want to add in- before conspicuous. “‘That means that if you want to stay conspicuous—as conspicuous as an Espeon can be…” seems to suggest that Gallia wants Amy to draw more attention to herself rather than avoid it which is at odds with the rest of the sentence.
I seem to recall one point which had conflicting pronouns, but I missed it on my editing-run through so it may have been a quirk of the moment.
In any case, I am very much enjoying the story. Your apprehension towards the quality of your work is completely normal and reveals a desire for excellence. Hold onto it, but don’t let it hold you back.

Just wanted to say that this chapter was really good. Sorry no long and complicated crític coming from me

As always, I enjoyed reading this. I wish there was more for me to binge, but I am content for now knowing it's a work in progress. I am interested in your portrayal of Fury's personality, however as the last book had him(if memory serves) more... extroverted? ...Maybe not the right word, but he definitely didn't come off as shy. Is there a reason for this change? And if so will we be getting a bit of his backstory to help us get to know the character better? I would also like to suggest having Fury go with Amy on her travels since it would lead to interesting situations with "their"(her) kit/egg. Plus he could better assist her, as a fellow eeveelution, in navigating the world she has been thrust into... I apologize if it seems like I'm being a back seat writer here, my brain won't shut up till it's been heard sometimes. If I'm being a pest in that aspect please tell me to hush with it and I will simply give reviews from then on.

Stellar chapter! The quiet dread at the beginning as Amy tries to figure out what is going on is really well done. Nice introduction of fury and Sirden! Hmm, a captain and a good points to go to the storage room. I am really liking fury as a character.

Ah, being bathed would be quite embarrassing. Sirden really gets to the point. Love the ravenous hunger part, as well as Gallia's reaction of Amy never even hearing of oran berries. Fury seems to be rather smart,but really shy about it, considering he correctly guessed what Amy was going for with humanity. Not to mention his existential thoughts, really interesting.

Constituent: being a voting member of a community or organization and having the power to appoint or elect. yeah, I think whoever found Amy is not exactly nicest if he considered giving Amy to Gallia an exchange.

Nice lore about the kingdoms. I am guessing that the Compass Isles are the Pluto of the world, huh? Explaining Pokemon as fictional is the best that Amy is going to be able to explain for the time being. No mind reading yet, but that gem joke could eventually be made reality. Fury is honestly adorable and nice on Sirden to give that tip for falling asleep. Guard duty, nice! Driving away the bad thoughts would be quite good for Amy's sanity and emotions.

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