Reviews for Little Moment: The Sorceress And The Knight
ImRaikaa chapter 12 . 10/16
Ah man, what a good story. It was really able to stir feelings of happiness, longing, and anger at all the right moments. You and Shadow have a hell of a gift for story telling, for character design, and setting.
I really wish the ending would've been a bit more conclusive, I felt like the emotional response as a reader was left without closure if that makes any sense. We're sad for Bezel dying, afraid for the Knight going forward, and angry at those who betrayed him. It just feels uncomfortable in my opinion.

That's the only real criticism I have for this story. I doubt you need my 2 cents or praise, but for what it's worth, you got a 9.5/10 from me lol.
I look forward to your future endeavors dude!
LongSword chapter 12 . 10/12
Always knew it was going to have a sad ending. But said fact did absolutely nothing to lessen the impact of the heartbreak of the last few chapters. It was a beautifully woven tale of love and tragedy that honestly left me teary. Thanks for the amazing read man.
Devor chapter 12 . 7/20
Yeah no man your bullshiting me I reread this chapter and this is clearly a cliffhanger ending the "Sir, youryour aura!" and "...and the world froze around him" lines clearly indicate that something happened afterwards, also I was sure the ending would somehow imply that Gwen (and Ben lol) are their descendants and since Boudica is another dimension and you said that humanity developed in this dimension difrently it means that the knight and Bezel lived and had more children (canon) or maybe someone from the lege-something dimension came to earth afterwards and that explains the origin of human mages and why there's so few of them where in this era most humans could use magic? I'm grasping at straws here since the Tennyson's being their descendants was pure speculation on my part but god dammit thers clearly something more to this ending and I'm not even sure I want a epilogue or if I want it to end here because you hurt me so badly I don't know if I can trust you anymore.(ะท)
Devor chapter 12 . 7/20
Man that was amazing fuck you thou this isn't canon, Parrin froze time the took the Knight and Bezel to the they they broke up and they lived happy ever after, this ending is bullshit didn't happen, not canon, fuck you. There story was amazing thou I just wished you weren't such a huge dick and a liar beacues non of this is canon fuck you.(love you)
Devor chapter 10 . 7/20
Why don't you just write a happy slice of life story then, huh? Or at least a boring story I can simply drop halfway through, instead of this riveting emotional rollercoaster I had to binge read in 1 day that I can't walk away from.
Devor chapter 9 . 7/20
10 years... what the fuck do you mean 10!? I knew I shouldn't read this after stones in the river but god dammit I was hoping you wouldn't hurt me like this again. Men I don't know how you'll do it but you better pull off some time travel bullshit because otherwise I'm going to cry. What do you mean 10 years He could't just missed out on 10 years of his daughters life, why are you hurting me like this dude, don't get me wrong I love every minute of it but this is breaking me you know? They are totally going back in time and fixing this somehow, this is my headcanon and I don't care what you say.
AirenLag chapter 12 . 7/19
'Thunderous applause' bravo! Such an amazing story, and a great addition to the universe (fan-universe?) Of little moments. It's been quite a journey to follow this story since it began. 'More applause'
Tactical Ochoa chapter 12 . 7/18
Damn. Just...damn. That's one hell of an ending. A great ending but also a sad ending as well. I so wanted for things to end on a better note for the Knight and Bezel but unfortunately, that's not the reality of their situation. As you said and as Stone in the River established, the fall of Atlantis didn't come with a happy ending. It's nice to know that Bezel and the Knight realized their mistakes, but it was too late to fix them. Parrin offered a solution to fix everything, but we all knew from Stone in the River that they would fail. The Knight lost everything. His locket is destroyed and he would never hear his mother's voice ever again. Bezel meant so much to him and she's now gone. He would never be able to see his daughter, Boudica, who in turn would never get to see her mother ever again. Things have been set for the future though. The Charms of Bezel, the time traveling spell, etc. Things will continue to move on and for the better. Earth was rebuilt and the events of the Ben 10 Original Series and the Little Moments series eventually occurred. At this point after Stone in the River and Kiss Me Goodbye, it's now a matter of hoping that Ben and Gwen in the new timeline don't go through a similar outcome. That they don't experience a similar outcome that Bezel and the Knight and Ben and Gwen in the old timeline experienced. That things do turn out better for them.

There's plenty of things that I'm so curious about after experiencing that ending. What has the Knight been up to after he lost Bezel? One theory that I had was that maybe he was the traveler that went back to the past to prevent the war from happening and thus became Paradox. I guess maybe Parrin was the one that actually traveled back to the past. Maybe. What about Boudica and Sacha and the others that fled to Legerdomain? What happened to Parrin and his Coven? If there are plans to cover the aftermath of this story, I'm looking forward to it. If not, it was one hell of a great ride reading through SAK. Impressive job. Stuff like this is why I like the Little Moments series so much. This series just brings so much justice to the Ben 10 franchise. I'm looking forward to continue following and reading Little Moments Rebooted and seeing what else this series has to offer.
delmartian chapter 12 . 7/18
That. Was. AWESOME.

In all the senses of that word, it applies to the whole story as well as the ending. I can only imagine what it took to make it happen. I hope to keep getting insight with re-reading. I definitely will keep enjoying the story. Lots of Easter Eggs, foreshadowing, flashbacks and side references to discover and reconsider.

Thanks for telling the story...
bastur chapter 12 . 7/18
A very compelling love story, with great character and a sad ending.
Beautiful.

Great work.
Guest chapter 12 . 7/18
Again out did yourself with this. Sort of hoping for a prologue but ok if this is the ending. I hate sad stories. Not gonna lie I probably won't come back for this story. But I respect this story for all the things it does for the lore and how good of a story it is on its own. Respect man respect.
Thor Cosmic chapter 12 . 7/18
War, drama, love, fantasy, tragedy & non-happy ending, these are my cup of tea.

Why do you used the sci-fi dimension that turn magic into energy attacks in the later canon series. It's lame as the later series become just another DC/Marvel superhero like universe. Its not. That's why classic standout among other heroes cartoon like Justice League or Teen Titan during that era. I always hated Alien Force and its later series, very abstract, bad, change in tone, & betray the classic lore.

A nice side story though to LM universe especially when Gwen & Ben are not presented. It really caught my attention when the Knight broke his vow. If he & Bezel are back together in the end, it make zero sense after all that happened. Tragic but realistic, logical & an emotional conclusion.

Oh it was Parrin & his coven that make the time travel spell not Bezel. She give her Heartstone away though. It was obvious there is incest & romantic relationship between Sacha & Boudica. The only question is does Bezel know about it, and she does now. Oh they're the same sh*tty council from Kiss Me Goodbye. Of course they are (Sarcastic).

I'm confident that Gwen & Verdona are the descendant of Bezel. Where for the Knight...I'm not such. He have blue eyes & black hair, so couldn't be Ben, but there are some similarity. Maybe a reincarnation, but I doubt it. I guessed we will never know what happened to "The Knight" after this as his name was forgotten in history. However, that doesn't mean this history can't be a foreshadowing in LM trilogy.
shadows59 chapter 12 . 7/18
Sometimes I think that I should hate you for this story because its such a tragedy, but it is the story of Atlantis and there is no other way that story could have ended. You made the world seem so real. Everyone had their faults and their good moments, and you showed how the expectations of the world trapped Bezel and the Knight, who I hoped all the way to the end would find some way to be happy. You monster.

Even the side characters seem real, Bezel's family is everything that the nobles are, right down to the lack of nobility. They're people who are spoiled and act like it and are so much worse than the family that she made. Boudica was adorable, the perfect mix of the strength of her mother and the temper of her father. I'm glad that she won't be alone in the new world. And I have to admit that Perrin was a favorite as her student. I wish that you could have done more with him, but I know how stories go.

And you've done so much world building for the Ben 10 universe. More than making it all a joke like the canon writers keep trying to do. You showed the world that Gwen and Charmcaster's magic just touches on. You even managed to make Ledgerdomain seem like a real place and you never even went there.

Thank you for this. For all the heartbreak, this was an amazing adventure.
Tactical Ochoa chapter 10 . 7/13
War sure did take quite a toll on Bezel. She didn't want for this to happen. She didn't want to be a part of it. Didn't want for her research and achievements be used for this. Logos' conflict with Atlantis led to Bezel doing the one thing that she vowed to never do; to breaking a promise that she made to herself. It feels like she is now worse off than she was before. Same with the Knight. Sloane is gone and so is Danel. Bezel and the Knight are losing everything that's important to them because of this war and because of what the leaders of both Atlantis and Logos are doing. I feel as if both Bezel and the Knight are really starting to realize the mistakes that they've made. It was hard seeing the Knight come to terms with the realization that Boudica is his daughter and how even though Bezel doesn't like the type of person that the Knight has become, she still wanted to be with him.

History seems to be repeating itself here. Logos is using Bezel's inventions as weapons much like Atlantis did. If you don't learn from the mistakes and flaws of others and end up doing the same things that they do, you become no better than the people that you're at war with. From what I can tell, I can see how Bezel could likely give up her support of Logos due to the actions and decisions of their leaders. I think I can see the same also likely happening with the Knight as well in regards to Atlantis given what Atlantis did to Zolim and Jorran's actions and whatnot.

I guess I'll eventually know what will happen when Chapter 10 and the Epilogue comes out soon. I'm really looking forward to it. This has just been one hell of a ride and I'm looking forward to seeing how this will all end. Hopefully on better terms for these two characters and their relationship with each other as well as the children that Bezel had put so much of her life into raising and taking care of.
shadows59 chapter 10 . 7/13
It seems fitting that the first battle of the war is at Banali City. Bezel and the Knight have tried as hard as they could, but they just can't escape the worst day of their lives, and its poisoned everything else. Logos is clearly the good guys in the war and this is a rebellion that's been brewing for a long, long time, but I can't help but wonder how long that will be true.

And I love seeing the golems! I never would have imagined that Charmcaster's favorite pets have been around for so long. Plus burying them for a sneak attack? A brilliant strategy that can only ever be used once.

Which only makes what happens after harder as the losses pile up. Both of them have lost people that they cared about now. Both of them have hurts that can't be healed. I'm just wondering how much they'll lose before all of this is over.

But if you hurt Boudicca it's pitchfork and torches time!
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