Very sorry to hear about your son and daughter. I hope you have something to look forward to this years holidays. Happy Holidays and Happy New Years!

I’m very sorry for your loss. I was reading your other entry of this story and I’m excited to see where you take this updated version! Again, I’m sorry about your loss and I hope that life is much kinder to you now

I’m truly sorry for your loss sending well wishes and prayers I loved the story! Very suspenseful and unique I can’t wait to read more :)

First of all, I'm truly sorry for your losses. After I read that, I don't really know what to say... maybe that despite all the hell you must have been through, you haven't lost the ability to create beautiful things, as I'm sure they were. I'm glad that you decided to write again and hopefully it will be useful and healing. Oh, and I wanted to suggest (only if you want) that you overwrite your previous chapters instead of posting a new story, so that people that follow and fav won't miss your updates :)

Very well written, and I look forward to more of your work.

I lost my best friend to suicide a month ago, and my brother attempted it right before then as well, I saved him from his OD, but just barely in time. I couldn’t save my best friend. Writing has given me an outlet, a temporary escape, may we both find some sort of comfort in it. 3

My condolences for your loss. I hope everything goes well for you!

I read both and will be patiently waiting! Keep up the good work!

This is so good, I hope you carry on with this.
You have so much potenntial
Stay strong

oh wow! I'm so sorry for your loss.
and please take your time writing this! i will enjoy it no matter what is written.

My condolences for your loss. I can’t imagine how you feel and I appreciate that you’re rewriting this story. I only found the old version today, but I absolutely loved it and look forward to the changes you’ll make.

I am so sorry for your loss. I really have no words for it. I've been following the original story since you published it, though I'm not sure if I ever reviewed it. But if I waited almost 4 years for an update, I can wait however long it takes you to continue writing. I wonder in what way Neji's presence in the present will change the old plot.

Blessings!

To start, I know it is meaningless, but I am sorry for your losses. I hugged my daughters extra tight after reading that. I can only begin to imagine your pain, I hope to never understand it.

I did want to review your actual story, I believe sometimes after loss a sense or normality can help?

I read the original story first and then saw your note about your rewrite and came to read this one. I enjoy the inclusion of Shisui and Neji, especially the way you depicted Shisui's goofy personality. I love the notion of him being difficult to take seriously off the battlefield and killing 100 men by himself on the battlefield.

I also really enjoy Sasuke's desire to have his brother tell him a story and pestering Itachi in bed from the original story. I really like the brotherly interactions.

I am personally conflicted about your description of Sakura. Your description was very detailed and well written do not get me wrong, I just like my characters beautiful. Maybe because I believe basically everybody can clean up and become beautiful. Your author's note about Sakura actually being beautiful and Madara trying to trick himself made me feel a bit better about it. But you did have conflicting things in your descriptions, some with Sakura being tall and some with her being short. Some with her being small and then having her have a large rear and weighing a lot. It is confusing. I think in Canon Sakura is on the petit side, but this is your take. You can do whatever you please.

Other that a consistent mix up of their, there, and they're in the original story your grammar is pretty decent. The flow of your story is nice. I look forward to more of the Itachi side of things once he finishes telling Sasuke the story. The storyline is original and I enjoy the medieval mixed with ninja vibe.

All in all I have really enjoyed both versions, thank you for sharing your writing with us.

I'm sorry for your loss. Please stay strong

I'm really sorry for your loss, i can't even begin to imagine all that you've been going through losing a family member is so painful, i can't even imagine what it would be like to lose your own child.. I send you all my love! This story is also really interesting I've read the old one but this new version is just as great and I'm looking forward to reading more.

My sincere condolences for your loss.
I always thought that there is no pain bigger than a mother or father feels when losing a child and I can't imagine how painful it is for you. But don't give up of the life, I will pray for you and your family.

I will follow your story and hope that writing, helps you overcome many things.