fucking shit don't read

I'm confused. Like, I genuinely have no idea what the f is going on...

I can understand wanting to take a step away from something. That’s probably the best thing to do. Go stretch your legs and work on something else. That’ll give you time to clear your head of this story and come up with new ideas. I’ll take a look at your other stories as well. Hope you do well on your new projects!

I’ve been really enjoying your story so far. It’s been a great read and I love the different feel it has. It’s much darker but has its light moments. I have to say though, I don’t really care for the common people knowing about the supernatural and knowing how to use magic. I just feel like it’s going to make life much too complicated.

I saif it before but your writing is insane man. Hope you keep your motivsyion to write

This story is really, really well written. Specifically the imagery and synesthesia that u convey through writing is just crazy. Like the part where issei experiences madness in his dreams is really something, you're an awesome writer. Really awesome work and I'll definitely keep reading!

I like how the story was going continue it

That sucks man. I know what you mean. Having read since the (first, i think?) rewrite, I kinda saw it getting off track from what you wanted, considering you had pretty much already done the big reveal in a previous iteration. It'll be tough to steer it back to that, or at least something like that with Merlin, since that seems to be the reincarnation you went for here, assuming you're sticking with that.

Either way do what you can man. I know I'll be along for the ride.

Also, if you need a beta, or someone to bounce ideas off of, just hit me up. I'll be available.

Ok

Do what you feel you need to. It never does anyone any good to force yourself to write a story that doesn’t flow right

Taking a break to rework what you have. I respect that. Even going through that before I update again.

Good for you. I believe it helps if you write out a story board timeline, and have like key arcs that will play a big part, and then sub chapters for each arc and as you move along it will help the story grow and flow in the direction you want to take it. basically have a bold chapter be the start of the arc and then have some bullet points under each story bold arc

STORY ARC 1
•arc chp one
•arc chp two
•arc chp three

STORY ARC 2
arc chp 1
arc chp 2
arc chp 3

and so on an so forth. and for each chapter under that arc write a brief chapter summary you hope to build and develop that arc to completion. Perhaps this will help your story writing in the future? If you need any help or someone to bounce ideas off of, just send me a private message or reply to my review and ill be sure to get on my laptop and read it, as i usually use my phone to read these stories.

shame, i loved it

I dont get why you dont fix said chapters when they started derailing

You know what, I am getting frustrated with this. I'm sorry. I give up. I read your summary and I was expecting what you laid out there. I was expecting an op Issei but what I keep reading seems to be the very opposite. It seems that you just want to mess with your readers when you place a declaration of intent but don't follow through. You make Issei's enemies op and you left what was supposed to be the main character in the dust.

I'm sorry, but this is just completely frustrating to read through. If you plan to continue this story, may I suggest to follow K. I. S. S? Keep it simple stupid. You can keep the drama. You can keep the progression but please, for the love of god, don't keep things ambiguous since it will just get confusing. At that point, what exactly is the point? We read novels and stories since we enjoy them. When ambiguous shit get involved in a story how exactly are we supposed to enjoy them then? Even mystery novels don't get as confusing as what you write. You provided us a summary that had completely nothing to do with the story you wrote, please, for all that is holy, stick to it or if you won't, change it to fit the story!