Me: looks at giant block of text at the bottom of the page.
Also me: horrible wrenching noises.

Yo dude/dudette thanks for not letting this story die even if it meant giving it up you rock for that. By the way when I try to look up your friend's account name I wasn't able to find it

So, sorry to see you in a creative slump. Hope you get out of it. Also, I couldn't find the person you gave the story to.

Well it’s sad to hear but I respect your decision I hope you continue your other stories.

Ps I couldn’t find your friend

I sincerely hope you get better at this there’s always places you can improve on and evaluate more/put in more detail to.

This chapter was much better than the first one, but remember there's always room for improvement.

I really hope you continue this it’s pretty good

You keep saying Precursor, do you mean Forerunner?

The only thing you really need to do is work on your spacings. Whole conversations are blurred together and is hard on the eyes to read.

Story is still good.

really brings out the story to look into the past for what you missed... just getting better and better for me... would help to break it up abit more so to not accidently skip lines here and there.

The story moves fast as fuck like seriously holyshit, now having said that the story idea is very interesting and something I would love to see but at a much slower Pace.

Ruby don't remember much of remnent so yeah also I help the author a little and he will try to make them longer and so forth that next chapter should be coming out soon if he has the time so plz be patient thank you

This chapter could have been broken up and elaborated on a bit better.
Still going to leave a follow

Hey mate love the idea you’ve got going here, just a bit of feedback perhaps, if your willing. You might want to add detail, nothing wrong with what you got, and it’s solid, it just feels rushed l, if you’d like and advice or would enjoy a chat just pm me back. Anyway keep the words rollin

Grammar needs a little work, but looks good so far.