Omg this is so good! I hope you decide to update this soon, it is definitely worth continuing.

please update, it's brilliant

hope to read more.

I love his so far you have a great base for an amazing crossover story that encompasses both worlds nicely. My ONLY issue with the writing so far is the enormous paragraphs. It’s all smooshed together where you could have at least five paragraphs in one. Discussions should not be smooshed as one paragraph. They should be going back and forth as their own.
The reactions of the speaker and his or her words would be one paragraph and then a new one would be the reactions and words of the other speaker. You need to split them up or it gets really hard to follow, I bet you’d get a lot more readers as well if you divide up you paragraphs a bit.

I like the story line, perhaps try to put breaks between the dialogue and the script. As it stands it is very hard to read and fallow the story.

i like how this story is being setup, gonna be interested to see how it goes from here

Nice story but hard to read because of the layout

He can't even take his families Grimores with him?

...wall-o-text hurts the eyes to read so PLEASE spread it out and not clumped up in a wall-o-text

I think this plot has potential and the writing so far is decent, but the current presentation is painful to read.

You need to break up the walls of text. A new paragraph for each speaker makes the text massively easier to read. It also makes it much easier to ensure that each sentence is capitalized in the beginning and ends with a point or comma as needed.

very good story but i hope you do a time skip so harry does not have to read all 7 years of hogworts

So far an interesting idea, but I would recommend breaking up the massive block texts. All those words together like that will drive readers off. Keep writing and improve to make your story blossom.