highschool dxd LMFAO

Too much, too fast, not enough explanation.

While I admit I was never able to finish Fairy Tail, I know enough to see how different this is. That's what Fanfiction is about, but there are limits to Suspension of Disbelief. Every change in this story has been like one punch after another and it's left me reeling, but not in a good way. First there was the Smoke of Plot Convenience (which would have been a much more effective literary tool if it brought about the changes over several in-story days), then Natsu and Wendy had form shifts (which had no prior explanation or foreshadowing, making them come from left-field, which only acts as half-hearted shock value over real impact), then Natsu's sick? Again, no prior explanation despite Wendy saying she knew about it. That would have been much more effective if the idea was introduced earier and we saw Wendy trying everything she could do to stop it, only to fail, leading to the battle in this chapter. That would have given all the time needed to lay the groundwork so the changes had more real flow rather than the aforementioned shock value.

All that said, writing is about practice and experience. As one writes, they make mistakes and learn from them; Heaven know's I've made plenty. Therefore, I'm going to see where this goes after I've mentioned what it could or could have been. Good luck.

Like this spin-off of Natsu (always thought he was stronger than what he showed).
As always thank that a little sex scene would enhance the story.

More please ,it's amazing.

more!

I love your story, but I'm sad that Wendy is not part of the Harem :'( what was the point of making her look older is she wasn't going to be in the harem?...
I really hope that at least you add her please!

ooooooh I'm getting really excited about this. I'm looking forward to how Natsu gets saved and what takes place after. It sounds like from the way she is speaking but I was curious if Wendy is gonna be apart of Natsu's harem, and I'm curious to see what you do with Lucy and Erza. I probably sound perverted for saying this but I do kinda hope for lemons in this story.

I definitely see the similarities with highschool dxd, but I still like it. I was just wondering what the deal is with the ghosts is for a dragon slayer?

i'm liking it so far after just finishing chapter one. I will admit I'm curious to see where it's going.

Wtf...

wait i thought there was more then 3 waifus (like i thought there was a lot) last time
also how did wendy get with the others when she was with natsu and the other girls who got super sexy transformation
also if she some how ended up abandoning the fight (for reinforcements) and ended up with the other why did they not react to the obvious wendy changes
also she already powered up why did she power up again or differently and then she j.d. i guess it was a modified chant but still also now is she the daughter of the chaos dragon slayer turned usurper wannabe false dragon king how

This is still awesome also I have a question will Cobra/Erik be joing our band of slayers?

Awesome story can't wait to read the next chapter. Hope that you add more to the harem, like hisui or maybe even Wendy, now that showing their true powers and forms can say that the "siblings" role was just a facade so everyone won't treating them weird, or in Natsu's case disgust. Hope you update soon.

Many things I didn't expect, yet here I am quite impressed with the first three chapters. I like where this is going and hope to see more like it in the future.

Great twist at the end with Wendy I didn’t see that one coming. Keep up the good work